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aries_luv_ppl
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0 posted 2003-01-02 08:29 PM


When the sky is clear,
When the wind is calm,
I sit outside at my balcony...and start...
   Wondering...and
      Pondering...

Is there really someone making the same wishes
On the other half of the sky
Glancing at the same yonder star...which...
So close I can see...yet...
So far I can't reach...

Don't worry too much
When the blues will go away;
Before you notice about it
Another angel will be descented...
   To earth...
     Just for you...

Star seems so far to reach,
But all lovebirds know,
The stars...
   Are in lover's eyes,
     And lover's heart...
All parents know...
   Their love...for their children...
     Flow still when they are far...away from home...

It is this hope...and special love
Between humans and all nature...
    That gives...being in love
      An extraordinary touch...

It would be a regret if...
If a person live without loving once.
Even if the love only last for a night,
   I shall have no regrets...

That doesn't mean I will give-in myself...
That only mean I will give the best to make the love last...
This is my wish...
   Would you grant, my star?

Eliza Simmons
~Sometimes when I look back at what I wrote, I don't recognize the 'Me' in the past anymore.

© Copyright 2003 Eliza Simmons - All Rights Reserved
CloudedDreams
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1 posted 2003-01-02 08:31 PM


This is wven beautifully, I enjoyed this one. It runs smoothly, and is something to ponder at
aries_luv_ppl
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2 posted 2003-01-02 08:53 PM


thanks for the nice comment Happy New Year!

Eliza Simmons
~Sometimes when I look back at what I wrote, I don't recognize the 'Me' in the past anymore.

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3 posted 2003-01-03 02:52 AM


Wow I really like the poem it is so true! It sounds just like something I would think about late at night!It is a wonderfull poem keep writing it would be a shame to waste your talent!

Live and laugh and make sure to always have Bella Amor (beautiful love)
~Bella~

aries_luv_ppl
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4 posted 2003-01-03 08:57 AM


thanks Bella for your kind comment. Everyone is talent in this forum, each has different magic.

Eliza Simmons
~Sometimes when I look back at what I wrote, I don't recognize the 'Me' in the past anymore.

WinterWren
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5 posted 2003-01-03 11:44 PM


Wow, that was a truly beautiful poem! It flowed very well and caught my attention right away. I really enjoyed this one. Well done.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

EleanorMoonbaby
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since 2002-09-02
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6 posted 2003-01-04 01:15 PM


I like the use of .... Makes the poem seem sort of like random, star-related thoughts. Can't help but wonder if anyone ever wishes on the same star I wish on.....
Ellie

"I'm terribly sorry ma'am,  my karma just ran over your dogma"

OtherSideOfTheMirror
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7 posted 2003-01-04 02:38 PM


WOWWWWWWWWWWWW I REALLY LIKE THAT! At first I was skeptical it seemed kind of like random thoughts and strange... but when I hit this part:

"It would be a regret if...
If a person live without loving once.
Even if the love only last for a night,
   I shall have no regrets..."

It all came together here and I love it I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

WOWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!


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