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foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

0 posted 2003-01-02 08:08 PM

Who am I?
I don't even know.
Where am I?
Is this some kind of show?
Some Wonderland I suppose.
I must be Alice.
Why is this land now filled with cruelty and malice?
What has happened?
Why has it changed?
Why has everything rearranged?
If I am the Alice,
Then what must I do???
I chase the white rabbit,
Now dead,stuck on a shoe.
Everyone dies violently
In this land filled with sorrow.
I'm afraid that even I
Won't be alive for tomorrow.
I will try my best.
Though it's hard to bear.
As I approach the Mad Hatter,
And the March Hare.
If I die I hope I'm remembered in glory.
Maybe these people can make up a story.

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

[This message has been edited by foreverwithyou (01-04-2003 12:33 AM).]

CloudedDreams
Member

since 2002-11-23

Posts 210
My Fantasy Realm

1 posted 2003-01-02 08:17 PM

these are strong words...this is powerful..good work!

dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

2 posted 2003-01-02 09:14 PM

hey,
this was really good.
it rhymed 2!!!!
great job!
~samantha~

"sometimes i just feel like
quittin i still might
why do i put up this fight?
why do i still write?"

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

3 posted 2003-01-02 11:59 PM

This was your best poem yet! This was so amazing. I would like to see a lot more writing like THIS from you! That was my favorite of yours out of all of the ones I`ve read. Those books Kenny got you must`ve done something..something GOOD! REALLY GOOD!!! "Let me find my balls..1,2...3 ok lets go."
*Allison*

"O My love
Please don`t cry
I`ll wash my bloody hands
And well start a new life"
-Good Charlotte

rimmie
Junior Member

since 2002-08-09

Posts 45
Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada

4 posted 2003-01-03 11:28 PM

Awsome job!...i really like the conections you made to the story...keep up the good work.

~RuZ~

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

5 posted 2003-01-04 12:23 PM

lol allison that was funny
"carbs are the enemy carbs are the enemy..."
(mutters)lol "scotties on fire'

darn those subtitles!!!!!
(quack quack)

yea thx everyone for replying i thought this was alright but u guyz alwayz make it great*tear*

omg we are having as family air hockey tournment!!!LET ME OUT!!!!i've played to many gamez already!!!!!

THX AGAIN
###CATHY### (cruise) lol sam&allison

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

Smoothy
Member

since 2002-12-02

Posts 119
The dark side of the moon

6 posted 2003-01-04 08:29 AM

Lewis Carrol meets Stanley Kubrick.

Love conquers all, so I must be in a losing battle.

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

7 posted 2003-01-04 11:32 PM

Well, this was interesting, and a perfect relation of the uncertainty and confusion of life. Great poem!
*~Rich~*

"You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!"

OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

8 posted 2003-01-04 11:41 PM

Wow.... I REALLY REALLY REALLY like that it's amazing. I think I'm going to save that. It's incredibly well written.

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

9 posted 2003-01-05 12:10 PM

thx the rest of u......
*quack quack*

###CATHY###

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

10 posted 2003-01-05 04:51 PM

(INSTRUMENTAL BREAK) singing in Russian..QUACK QUACK!!
O Ok and the plan is..SCOTTY DON`T!!!!
I HAVE AN OLDER BROTHER YEA!!!! Well technically now I have ..3!!! and a sis! the same age as me!!
Sean..
DONT U EVER SAY HIS NAME AGAIN!!!
Scottie is on fire but...after I talked to you last night..LEO WAS ON FIRE!!! LOL How was Tom? Good?
Yes this seems to be going on and on..o well!!! LOL
Member when Peanut bit my back? That hurt!
Member when u flung beef at me? and the face I made when I did it in slow motion yesterday?
ORANGE PEEL!!!!! LAWNMOWER!!!! GREEN GRASS!! I think a lime jello scented candle would be good..We should start our own candle store and not have icky smelling ones! Yea..I`m gonna stop now. TTYL
*Allison*

"O My love
Please don`t cry
I`ll wash my bloody hands
And well start a new life"
-Good Charlotte

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

11 posted 2003-01-05 08:41 PM

lol that was funny allison!!!!
anywayz yea so theres nuttin funny left to say!!!!!

how was Leo????lol that does go on and on dont it?
did that Yoga book i bought for u help out at all????
Hope it did.
yes i flung beef at u that was funny.
the orange peel candle smelt disgusting.
Tom was good lol (heh heh heh)

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

jeffwillett
Member

since 2003-01-04

Posts 86
Texas, US

12 posted 2003-01-05 10:04 PM

nice word useage, not my favorite poem but you used ur vocabulary better than i use mine

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