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WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
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...Coming to

0 posted 2002-12-31 04:54 PM



A beautiful siren sits alone
Weaving her sad song through the clouds
They come running,
All the men who hear her call
To fall at her feet
Wishing for just one touch.
All except the one she wants
The one for whom she sings
He doesn't hear her song.
She doesn't want him to fall,
She just wants him to stand by her side
To share with each other the things they've seen in life.
But he doesn't hear,
And her song gets sadder still.
Finally he looks her way
Only to turn his back and walk away
She gets up from her throne of mourning
To dance in her showers of pain.


No this isn't about me, it's sortof about a friend of mine.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

© Copyright 2002 Stephanie White - All Rights Reserved
CloudedDreams
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since 2002-11-23
Posts 210
My Fantasy Realm
1 posted 2002-12-31 04:56 PM


Man, I write a sad one and you love it, and you write an even sadder one and I love it. I really like this one. I feel this way sometimes...except for the other men falling at my feet... that never happens...lol
Hope your friend's situation gets better! Have a wonderful day!

Yes there will be tommorrow, but will you be there to greet it?

devinechild22
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since 2002-08-28
Posts 571

2 posted 2003-01-01 12:31 PM


Same here Clouded Dreams!!!I loved this poem. It was so beautifully written. You have a lot of talent!
             *Allison*

"O My love
Please don`t cry
I`ll wash my bloody hands
And well start a new life"
-Good Charlotte

Rainbowdust
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since 2002-12-05
Posts 320
Sydney, Australia
3 posted 2003-01-02 11:24 PM


I've always been drawn to the story of the sirens and their mysterious allure. They're always portrayed as evil creatures though who woo seamen to their doom, and I've never read or seen anything written from their point of view. This was beautifully done.. and going straight into my library!

The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears.

aries_luv_ppl
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since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448
Universal Mind
4 posted 2003-01-03 02:35 AM


this is woven very beautifully! I love it!

Eliza Simmons
~Sometimes when I look back at what I wrote, I don't recognize the 'Me' in the past anymore.

Smoothy
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since 2002-12-02
Posts 119
The dark side of the moon
5 posted 2003-01-03 08:21 AM


Sad, romantic types, aren't we? I'm back again and this is something nice for me to return to. Well done.

Love conquers all, so I must be in a losing battle.

HopelessRomanticGuy
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since 2001-08-17
Posts 495
LI, New York
6 posted 2003-01-03 05:28 PM


Well, I don't know what to say but that I loved this.  It's kinda how I feel often enough, but than again, my name says it all, dosen't it?  I'd feel sorry for your friend, but to give pity is to insult them, so I'll just say I'm sorry things like that happen to anyone.  The past year was like that for me somewhat.  We are the sad romantic types, this I cannot deny.
                   *~Rich~*

"You can't hurt meee!!  'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!"

cherish
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since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........
7 posted 2003-01-12 12:37 PM


nicely done, 'twas sad, but the imagery was beautifull nonetheless!

Are you scared?                                        BOO! Are you now?

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Riding
8 posted 2003-01-12 02:30 PM


Oooh, this hit me. Beautiful imagery and words. *smiles*
anawnda
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since 2002-07-26
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9 posted 2003-01-13 02:35 AM


man i wish i was the one who wrote this, beatiful poem, i love it
Susie
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since 2002-12-19
Posts 36
Illinois
10 posted 2003-01-14 08:31 AM


i also dont have mcuh 2 say bout it except that it was great and i LOVED it!!i think that every1 feels like that sometime in their life about one thing or another~i no i have and i felt like i was readin bout me!again~great job!!
WindSong
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since 2002-12-23
Posts 313
Long Island, New York
11 posted 2003-01-14 08:43 PM


I liked this, as I do many of your works. Easy to read and easy to understand...(That doesn't happen much for me..I get confused..ask anyone.) I liked how you were able to write about a friend, I can't do taht. It's gotta be about what I'm thinkin or doing...something I like...Good jkob....See ya! ~*~Kirah~*~ PS...putting in me library. :-)

*Mistakes are made, you pay for them, then you do it again.*
~*~Love doesn't make the world go 'round, it just makes the ride worthwhile~*~

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