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Teen Poetry #6

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WindSong
Member

since 2002-12-23

Posts 313
Long Island, New York

0 posted 2002-12-29 11:20 PM

To bring one to
testify life,
would be to ask
the Devil to stop
rasing hell.

The Devil lives
inside you, and
kills the good.

Time for Death,
Time for Death.

A thought that reigns
in every dark childs
head.

Lay in the bed of
mourning, free from
the tourment of
life,
but leaving behind
who once loved you.

It's over, you've
testified against a
sick childs
mind.

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darkling
Member

since 2001-08-28

Posts 90
altered state of mind

1 posted 2002-12-29 11:23 PM

perhaps a good title would be "darkness"? That sure seems to be a reoccuring theme in this work. I enjoyed it ever so much

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

2 posted 2002-12-29 11:24 PM

Wow, I don't really get this one, but thats cuz it's 11:30 at night.. lol. I won't be much help until next time, but I think it's good... if only I got it... lol. Later!

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