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Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2002-12-29 05:44 PM

this is coming at you
like a nuclear war
lyrical bombs, all out
have you noticed
this anger
is directed at you
im sorry that you
have to bear the brunt
give me something
that i wont laugh at!
im here to make you cry
an eye for an eye
insult for an insult
are you curious
as too why
im so angry inside?!
this is your one chance
that one time
when im letting loose
bunning
and working on a scheme
be afraid
look at what just hit
the ceiling
tu pense que je suis
la pour toi
non! tu me fait mal
je vomit sur tes affairs
get out of my way
do u realize
im crying now
can you stand up
im here with the blindfold
heres the gun
world war 3
im the jew
im the person who will
haunt your dreams
do u see how sad I am?
forgive me?
ah, forget that
je te vois
est ce que tu vois
que je suis enrager!?
bang your hands
on the table
start skunking
im pissed
strumming the bass
banging the drums
blood
booze
im just letting it out
sigh..
im exhausted
too much anger

Regina

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

1 posted 2002-12-29 05:51 PM

You already know how I feel about this one... Definately a library piece

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

2 posted 2002-12-29 05:58 PM

I agree with Sky, definitely a library piece! Very well written. Keep 'em coming!
(I also had fun trying to translate the French since I just started taking it haha.)

*Me*
I'm pasteing my smile back on just to please you... I always knew Elmer's glue was good for something...

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

3 posted 2002-12-29 10:45 PM

This was incredible! Also heading to my library too. Just... awesome.

"You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!"

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

4 posted 2002-12-29 10:46 PM

All that, and I forgot to add it... lol

"You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!"

Stinky Twinkie
Member

since 2002-11-26

Posts 204
Dinwiddie

5 posted 2002-12-30 12:01 PM

At first, I thought this was gonna be a rap song or something...hahaha. I think this a pretty darn good poem. The French (I think its French) kinda confused me, but that happens all the time. Good read.

-Stinky Twinkie doesn't speak French-

knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

6 posted 2002-12-30 05:03 AM

as emotionally charged as always Regina. You know how to let it rip. I'm lazy and didn't take the time to translate the french, but I liked how you incorportaed it into your poem. Keep posting dear, I'll keep reading.

“A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.”

..You can't fight the tears that aren't coming..

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

7 posted 2003-01-12 12:42 PM

Most definately something to keep. Regi, I love your stuff- keep writing woman.

Are you scared? BOO! Are you now?

Jaime

Registered

Member
Posts 250

8 posted 2003-01-12 10:44 PM

"are you curious
as too why
im so angry inside?!"

I really liked these lines. I think because the idea of anger inside is a hell of a lot more intense than anger outside. Anger inside is a full blown hurricane destroying everything.

Lovely poem. I thought you conveyed anger very well.

Oh, and the French was a lovely little switch. Kind of dips into how anger is a universal thing and that we're all subject to it. It also reminded me to brush up a bit on my french since I'm going to Quebec in February. I haven't taken any classes in months.

- Jaime

Shiva went on break now look at how much it's gonna take to make this place a space where we can breathe.

[This message has been edited by Jaime (01-12-2003 10:48 PM).]

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

9 posted 2003-01-15 02:46 AM

Regina~
This is an incredibly well written piece.
You've expressed the anger perfectly and
done so in an extremely powerful manner.
This just screams to be heard...and I did hear.
You are such a talented writer, Regina. I hope
you'll continue to share your work with us.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

10 posted 2003-01-15 08:17 AM

Regina, this is so full of passion. I love it. Ditto what Jaime said about the French section. It was a smart thing to add. Languages give pieces such an amazing lift and the French in this truly added to a poem already brimming with emotion.

Well done. I hope this person got what was coming to them.

~AF~

Don't steal - the Government hates competition.

Susie
Junior Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 36
Illinois

11 posted 2003-01-15 08:31 AM

WOW!!!that was so greatly expressed!!i loved it and i loved the way u expressed your feelings~i wish i had your talent!!that's going straight to my library!!

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

12 posted 2003-01-15 08:32 AM

Wow, that was really cool. The french screwed me up a little bit cause i couldn't understand but still, its not what I expected from the title, and I love that. Great job Regina....

Riley

Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you......

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