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ShadyMakaveli
Member

since 2002-08-21

Posts 128

0 posted 2002-12-28 10:40 PM

Getting prepared for a change
Life moving fast around me
Looking back things aren't the same
Lost in a sea full of memories

Thoughts trapped in a haze
Answer seeking became my mission
Feeling wrong in my ways
Still stuck in the same position

Feels like life's a bad dream
Unable to wake up to reality
At times I just wanna scream
Breakdown, let life get the best of me

Don't wanna roll over and die
Can't find the strength to fight
This life makes me want to cry
So much wrong not enough right

CloudedDreams
Member

since 2002-11-23

Posts 210
My Fantasy Realm

1 posted 2002-12-28 10:49 PM

that was really great, I can't think of any title suggestions though. I can relate to this poem really well. I like the way you express things

Yes there will be tommorrow, but will you be there to greet it?

aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

2 posted 2002-12-29 01:28 AM

Nice.

Eliza Simmons
~Sometimes when I look back at what I wrote, I don't recognize the 'Me' in the past anymore.

OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

3 posted 2002-12-29 01:27 PM

Nice. I like this a lot.The rhyming seems kind of forced but hey I do that too... I really like it, though I can't think of a title. Maybe you could title it by whatever triggered you to write it? Hmm, I don't really know... sorry.

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

4 posted 2002-12-29 06:03 PM

This was really good. I agree with OtherSideOfTheMirror about the rhyme seeming a little forced, but I think you made it work. Nicely done!

*Me*
I'm pasteing my smile back on just to please you... I always knew Elmer's glue was good for something...

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

5 posted 2002-12-29 10:41 PM

THis was great, I can relate to this very well, I know how that kind of dispair feels. I tried to think of a title, but none were any good... sorry. WEll, later!

"You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!"

dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

6 posted 2002-12-30 10:33 PM

hey,
sry it took me a while to reply
but i am glad i read it
this was great!
~samantha~

"sometimes i just feel like
quittin i still might
why do i put up this fight?
why do i still write?"

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