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CloudedDreams
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0 posted 2002-12-27 10:23 PM


Waiting

I look at life and what do i see
You, causing me misery
Always ready to pounce on my back
Making sure you are to point out what I lack

You seem like you're perfect in every way
and no one has anything to say
So high and mighty you might be
Cursing me with this jealousy

(chorus)

Waiting, waiting, waiting,
Like a worm, here I lie
Waiting, waiting, waiting,
Watching you in the sky
Waiting, waiting, waiting,
As I begin to cry
Waiting, waiting, waiting...
I'm drinking the poison you give....
         and wanting you to die

But as you sit upon you cloud so pure
I know your blessing will not endure
Fate will catch up on you soul
And when it does, it won't let go

This will all fall back on you
When everything you know falls through
Pain is something you can't evade
And the mosters that haunt you is only what you made

(chorus)

  waiting for you to die.....

© Copyright 2002 Eliza K. - All Rights Reserved
WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
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1 posted 2002-12-28 12:36 PM


Woah, some really powerful emotions there, I liked the way you put it, though I don't know about waiting for someone to die.. Well I liked it anyway. It was really very good.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

CloudedDreams
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2 posted 2002-12-28 11:35 AM


that is supposed to be like a metaphor.... i am saying I am wanting them to hit reality, but I am suffering instead...

I don't want anyone to die...lol

Yes there will be tommorrow, but will you be there to greet it?

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