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Moon & Stars |
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WindSong Member
since 2002-12-23
Posts 313Long Island, New York 
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~Here's a little backround information...My life has been a troublesome path. I lost (died) my grandmother a little over a year ago. In that I lost a best friend (Moved down south). And a lot of other crap happened that I rather not get into. Anyway, I always had this thing with the Moon and the Stars. My room is a galaxy with sheets and a comforter to match. I love them! (Moon and stars that is). That is why I wrote this and also because I'm a little bit unhappy this evening. As I said in my last one, I'm not that good at the poem stuff yet.~ The night is dark but a moon gives enough light where you can see your hand. The stars are the light that give me the power to be who I am. Both together, reflect upon me and catch me while I fall. They watch as I make mistakes, and yet they still twinkle. The moon is the base of life in my eyes. The stars are the dead ones that have come and gone through my eyes. Both reflect me in ways that hurt but at the same time, Love me. ~Ones being the people who have died throught my life.~ |
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StellarChica Member
since 2002-07-06
Posts 207floating down a river... |
This was spectacular. And your room sounds awesome. I want stars covering my ceiling. I love stars.  |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
This was very good. I understand where you are coming from intirely! I lost my Grandpa not to long ago and he and I were very close..This actually gave me an idea for a poem! Not about the stars and stuff but an idea! Thank you! I think your writing is very good and I can`t wait to see you grow and become a more mature writer! You have a lot of potential! *Allison* "O My love |
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Star T Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 182Philadelphia, US |
hey windsomg i think that was a nice poem.i love the moon and stars too and have written more than a poem involving them.especially the stars.my friends even call me Star...which makes my love for the stars even greater.so yes!!! i definitely love ur poem and as for who u lost,time will reduce the pain,even if it wont take it all away. take care... |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
*gasp* That was a truly wonderful piece, I really enojoyed it, and now Im gonna put it in my library so I can enjoy it more another time. Don't worry WindSong, your not alone in having all kinds of bad things in your life, I could go on and on telling you all the horrible things that have happened in mine.(don't worry I won't bore you like that)But there are good times too, and if we can share them with friends, then we can call ourselves rich. And if our friends are there to help us in the rough spots, then we can call ourselves blessed. (hey that was pretty good, I need to remember that) Laugh often, love much, live well. WinterWren |
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WindSong Member
since 2002-12-23
Posts 313Long Island, New York |
Thank you. Life sucks a lot of the time. Not all my friends are true ones though. They don't really understand me. Maybe between one and three of them do, but still friends are supposed to know how you feel and stuff...mine just don't get it. They push me over the edge. I guess it's my fault too. I can't open to all my friends, trust issues. I open to one particular person but with that is memories are painful. So I rather not talk about it. Thanks for your input, it was nice and funny. Thanks! |
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roxywrestlegirl04 Member
since 2002-10-29
Posts 74good ole DINWIDDIE |
o my...that was AWESOME...my room is a galaxy too!!  keep up the good work...you may not think u are good at it....but u seem to be getting better...GOOD JOB!!!  LIZ live,love,and die...but take RISKS..thatz what makes life worth the living, love worth the heartache,and death the new beginning! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
WindSong~ I really enjoyed reading this piece. I agree with the others...you have a lot of potential and I can see your talent in this piece. I'll be looking for lots more from you.  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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WindSong Member
since 2002-12-23
Posts 313Long Island, New York |
Thank you all so very much. Do they make glow in the dark paint? Because hopefully after the holes in my wall get fixed, I want to paint my ceiling black and get stencils and paint them on it...and maybe paint my walls a light navy blue. and stencil that as well. enough of those stupid stiocky things that don't stick! lol. THanks again! BYe! |
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Rainbowdust Member
since 2002-12-05
Posts 320Sydney, Australia |
As another moon and star lover, I have to say that this was absolutely beautiful! My favourites lines were: They watch as I make mistakes, and yet they still twinkle. It's a gift to be able to find solace in a force which provides unconditional understanding and acceptance, and I'm glad you've found yours. Keep shining... The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears. |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Man... every time I read something of yours, it sends me on a trip down memory lane... maybe its the fact that we have so much history intertwined... though it was only what? 2 years I was there? Well, whatever it is, it gives me a deeper appriciation of your poems. I remember the circumstances, too... I hope I was some help during those troubled times. Ehh, don't mine me, I'm feeling rather morose today. Great poem! *~Rich~* Too strong to give up, to weak to move on.... |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
For thinking that your not very good at this poem stuff yet you sure posses a lot of talent! I myself in a moon lover and a gazer of the stars I wrote a poem about it too awhile ago! I love this piece I know what you mean and I can feel you feelings thoughout the whole thing! Keep it up! Live and laugh and make sure to always have Bella Amor (beautiful love) |
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