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OtherSideOfTheMirror
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since 2002-12-19
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0 posted 2002-12-21 03:41 PM


I HATE GROWING UP I HATE GROWING UP! Hah, so here's some thoughts on that all righty?

Another day, another dream,
Remember a promise made...
From days when each day brought a scheme
And we did all things forbade.

Remember each lap, each mile,
Each step to the other side.
Remember times that made you smile
And those when you cried.

So each day was quickly passed
And we counted each shooting star.
We thought it would forever last,
And we found who we are.

Remember each risk and it's reward,
And for once step on the crack.
There's another day to look toward,
And don't always watch your back...

Another day, another dream past...
So what are you waiting for?
The choices we make so fast
Can make us lost forevermore.

© Copyright 2002 OtherSideOfTheMirror - All Rights Reserved
vlraynes
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1 posted 2002-12-21 03:47 PM



Cassi~
I really enjoyed reading this piece.
Love the message in it and the way in which
you've conveyed it.  Very nicely done.
You are a talented poet and I hope to see lots
more from you.
~Vicky
P.S. Check your e-mail again.

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

[This message has been edited by vlraynes (12-21-2002 03:48 PM).]

xxxnuttyangelxxx
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since 2002-12-06
Posts 72
New York
2 posted 2002-12-21 04:02 PM


Veryy nicely penned, i enjoyed this very much. You can capture beauty in every moment. Great write

much luv,
shea

vlraynes
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3 posted 2002-12-21 04:33 PM



Cassi...you've got mail...again.

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

vlraynes
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4 posted 2002-12-21 04:49 PM



And one for time...lol.

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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5 posted 2002-12-21 06:53 PM


"So each day was quickly passed
And we counted each shooting star.
We thought it would forever last,
And we found who we are."

oh excellent great poem, but I loved this part

Hyper Sensitive
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since 2002-12-18
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6 posted 2002-12-21 08:48 PM


I like this a lot!!

-heatherlynne-

"I'm all by myself, the way I wanna be." - Silverchair

aries_luv_ppl
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since 2001-09-20
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Universal Mind
7 posted 2002-12-21 09:04 PM


thoughts provoking! nice

Eliza Simmons
~Sometimes when I look back at what I wrote, I don't recognize the 'Me' in the past anymore.

Rainbowdust
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since 2002-12-05
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8 posted 2002-12-22 06:13 AM


I loved this! Well done.. and remember that growing old is mandatory, growing up is not!

The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears.

foreverwithyou
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since 2002-10-20
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Wonderland
9 posted 2002-12-22 01:16 PM


"Remember each risk and it's reward,
And for once step on the crack.
There's another day to look toward,
And don't always watch your back..."


That part was my fave tho the whole poem fits together and is great as a whole but this was really good!thx for replyin to mine

    ###CATHY###

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

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10 posted 2002-12-22 07:44 PM


Wow, this was really great.  I liked the title, and the flow was great.  The ending was very strong.  Nicely done.
(I couldn't help but start singing the Toys R Us song when reading your little note - "I don't wanna grow up, I'm a Toys R Us kid..."  Haha, dont mind me.)

*Me*
I'm pasteing my smile back on just to please you...  I always knew Elmer's glue was good for something...

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