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LTEvans
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since 2002-12-06
Posts 72
Lenham, England

0 posted 2002-12-20 11:44 AM


Turntables

On turntables in time,
We go drifting around,
All waiting for the record to skip.

On a circle of lies,
We go hanging down,
All waiting for the record to slip.

On a disc of life,
We go tumbling round,
All waiting for the record to stop.

We go reluctant at most,
While we watch our host,
As it stops and starts up,
The record that we want turned off.

Solipsism saves us from the atavism of the Equalitarian.

LTEvans

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OtherSideOfTheMirror
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since 2002-12-19
Posts 245

1 posted 2002-12-20 03:46 PM


its good but not as complex as the other... easier to understand as far as whats going on in the poem but maybe not what the metaphor of the whole thing is. I like your style overall I'll be keeping up with your writing for sure!

-OtherSideOfTheMirror

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