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Darkness Member
since 2002-10-17
Posts 202The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies. |
She sits alone and crys for her past life, It's escaped her once again. She weeps at the tales of the broken man, He spent his life alone. At last she's not blind to see what happened, Why she's on the street. Her life leaves her again, She's fallen by the wayside, So cold outside living alone, She can't help but wonder why. Her eyes are wet due to happiness lost, The vortex where time went wrong. Beaten, battered, and left for dead, The ice cracks her skin. Sick and frail body face down in the snow, She won't last a week. She's crying out again, The pain is just to much, She has no faith in God anymore, Because he won't tell her why. She stakes her place on the exit ramp, And walks from car to car. With tear streaked cheeks she begs for a meal, And they don't even look. They drive off to their nice warm home, But she's still left alone. She reflects herself again, Cast out by sociaty, 12 years old to fend for herself, And all she wants to know is why. |
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BrokenAngel Member
since 2002-01-06
Posts 141Puryear, TN, USA |
Wow. Thats about the only thing I can say every time I read your work. I love the way you portray the girl in this one. Really shows just how a person like this feels, especialy at 12 years old. How did you get your inspiration for this one? I can't help but think you know some one like this with the way you told her story so well. Great write, keep it up!! ~*~*~Night Angel |
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Darkness Member
since 2002-10-17
Posts 202The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies. |
Thanks so much! I got the insparation for this one because I saw a homeless person on the exit ramp one day when I made a wrong turn. He went from car to car asking for a meal. He came to mine and I didn't even look. I was scared and uncomfortable. I was so ashamed that I couldn't even help out one person I almost broke down in tears right there. Thats where the insparation came for She. |
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wvplayernotreally Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 215yakima wa |
Hey great post wonderful to see ya again here...Myself having had met some homeless teenage girls around 12 i heard stories similar to them...you gave them a voice...a voice that people aren't comfortable to explore..but i give you 2 big huge thumbs up!!! " I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking." |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Darkness~ Wow...this is such a heartbreaking piece, and unfortunately so full of reality. I think many of us have had those moments, when, for one reason or another we have looked away instead of lending a helping hand. I know that, though I often do try to help, there have been times when I haven't and it has haunted me long after the moment passed. You have told this story very well and with such heart. It comes to life for the reader. An incredible write and an extremely powerful and touching read. I commend you for writing this and for sharing it with us. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (12-21-2002 02:15 AM).] |
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OtherSideOfTheMirror Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 245 |
"She has no faith in God anymore, Because he won't tell her why." Wow that's a great line and it really makes the whole thing just... real. Sad, but real. I thank you a lot for not sweetening it, desensitizing it... and for admitting that you yourself looked away. It's great. -OtherSideOfTheMirror |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
This was a heartbreaking poem. Its unfortunate how much of a reality this is for so many children. It really makes me look at how society treats homeless people. They shake their heads and say "What a shame" instead of trying to help someone. THAT is the shame in it all, because most of these kids can't help the situation they're in, but these millions of people who just shake their heads CAN do something about it. Again, great job here. *Me* |
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