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vballplaya18
Junior Member

since 2002-07-30

Posts 12

0 posted 2002-12-15 12:30 PM

Have you ever felt so strongly,
Strong enough for one person
That you think about them 24/7?

Have you ever just wished
That one day
Your dreams of the two of you
Will be reality?

Have you ever wondered
What exactly would have happened
If you had just acted differently?

But most of all,
Have you ever known
That the feelings won't be returned
And your dreams will be just that
Dreams and only dreams
And that how you acted
Screwed up every chance you ever had
And that no matter how much
You sit and think of them
That they will never think of you?

And is all you have ever wanted
was for things to get better?
And for time to hurry up and heal the pain?
Have you ever?
Because I have.

rOxXbabY391
Member

since 2002-12-14

Posts 71

1 posted 2002-12-15 05:02 PM

awww I loved your poem cause i can VERY much relate to the whole situation :-(

"Have you ever just wished
That one day
Your dreams of the two of you
Will be reality?"

that was very go0od! :-D
~*~eMiLy*~

"I don't think I can make it through one more night. 'Cause how do you answer "What's wrong?" ~ when nothing is right.

wvplayernotreally
Member

since 2002-11-06

Posts 215
yakima wa

2 posted 2002-12-15 09:26 PM

wow that reminded me of that one Brandy song...good job! i really enjoyed that

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

LTEvans
Member

since 2002-12-06

Posts 72
Lenham, England

3 posted 2002-12-16 05:11 AM

Very nice poem. I always like to see questioning lines it adds depth.

I'll have more of a look later.

Very GOODDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD

Solipsism saves us from the atavism of the Equalitarian.

LTEvans

aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

4 posted 2002-12-16 04:17 PM

Nice. I can relate to that. It is a past, but I will remember. Thanks for sharing.

Eliza Simmons
~Sometimes when I look back at what I wrote, I don't recognize the 'Me' in the past anymore.

xxxnuttyangelxxx
Member

since 2002-12-06

Posts 72
New York

5 posted 2002-12-16 05:01 PM

This was so sad, it made me cry ..yea im a softy lol.. this was a very good write.. which many people im sure can relate to .. i know i can... well written

shea

roxywrestlegirl04
Member

since 2002-10-29

Posts 74
good ole DINWIDDIE

6 posted 2002-12-18 10:27 AM

i really really really like your writing....great job....keep it up!!

LIZ

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

7 posted 2002-12-19 02:26 AM

vballplaya18~
I'm sure that many of us, including myself,
can answer 'yes' to at least some of the
questions that you have posed in this write.
You have written this in such a way that the
reader can 'feel' the words and make them their own.
Very nicely done.
Hugs,
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

mindy
Junior Member

since 2002-12-18

Posts 34
VA, US

8 posted 2002-12-19 10:22 AM

I love this poem...Alot of us can relate to situations like these...Atleast I know I can! You can definitely see that you wrote this poem from personal experience...the way every writer should write. Great Job!

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

9 posted 2002-12-20 12:30 PM

YES! I have! Really good poem, I enjoyed the read! ALot!

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

10 posted 2002-12-20 03:28 PM

Good poem. The questioning is really good because it allows you to divide what you want to say into stanzas more easily. Good use of poetic technique.

OtherSideOfTheMirror

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