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That Beautiful |
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StellarChica Member
since 2002-07-06
Posts 207floating down a river... |
I steal your umbrella, So I can watch the way the rain forms on your hair. [Did you know that you were this beautiful?] And so maybe now, You'll know what it's like, To constantly have this rain beating down on you. I've been drowning in it since that first day I saw you. . . [Did you know that you were this beautiful?] And now I steal your umbrella, So I can watch you drown in my final plea for you. [Turns out you weren't that beautiful after all..] *~erin~* "It's hard to look in the mirror these days when everyone else has everything you'd rather be."-Saves The Day |
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Avis Junior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 38Raleigh, NC, USA |
I like the imagery in this poem, and I enjoy the concept as well. I know what it feels like when you admire somebody and they turn out to be less than what you expected. Thanks for sharing! Peace and Love, |
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CloudedDreams Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 210My Fantasy Realm |
W__O__W!!! that is so so so so GOOD!! I really like this one, the words used mean so much. Great job! Yes there will be tommorrow, but will you be there to greet it? |
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xxxnuttyangelxxx Member
since 2002-12-06
Posts 72New York |
Wow the imagery was absolutely amazing. This piece of work has so much feeling contained inside. I know exacly wut you mean when you admire someone and then they turn out not all they are craked up to be... this was truely an excellet poem ..thank you for sharing... shea |
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