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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain 
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dawn colors, oreo chocolate sky white creme lies in the horizon your Friday brings another week beyond the grave it will last cycles show growth through you perhaps the minister preaches life in its simplest present looking back to blank we stumble on the root of ancestors so long again it will be... Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you...... |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
I LIKE!I LIKE! I like banana chocolat epudding..I had some today actually..LOL..But this poem was extremely good.. Very well written piece I must say! Goos job..Very nice visuals! *Allison* "Sorry I`m not home right now. I`m walkin in the spiderwebs so leave a message and I`ll call you back." |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
I read this about three times to make sure I understood the depth of it... it's such an obscure picture, but you make it so vivid. You're an extremely gifted writer, Riley. Brian Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored. |
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ShadyMakaveli Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 128 |
I agree with Brian you are a very good writer, i liked this poem alot. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Riley~ I also have read this several times now. I really enjoyed your choice of words and the way that you used them in this piece. You've painted quite a picture here. Another VERY well written piece.  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
I'll give you credit on this Riley, I thought it was a brilliant piece. Are you scared? |
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