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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571
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Silly little snowflake You fell onto my glove I stared at you Your different patterns I was bedazzled by your beauty Then as soon as you had come You melted away Gone forever Only a memory Never to be seen again. |
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foreverwithyou Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 204Wonderland |
hehe heh snowflakez i like em!!!and also this poem  "I am who I am who I am who am I?" |
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Jaime
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MemberPosts 250 |
I love winter. I love snow. But this poem went so much farther than snowflakes.. (at least for me it did) *shrugs* I over-analyze.  i was here |
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Stinky Twinkie Member
since 2002-11-26
Posts 204Dinwiddie |
Snowflakes own you! They are awesome until they thaw out and refreeze and ice up the roads. -Stinky Twinkie- |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
I like this concept, Allison, but I would love to see this drawn out a bit further, taken into more of a descriptive sense, and applied more globally. You could have used the snowflake device to communicate a lot of universal concepts, which I feel you've done inadvertently anyhow... I would grab the snowflake and take it for a trip in the concept of beauty and loss. Maybe that's just me? Allison, if you want to ensure that I reply to you, please check your critique flag in your profile. That way I can make comments like this to constructively criticize. (edited by moderator)  Parasite [This message has been edited by vlraynes (12-08-2002 11:58 AM).] |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
hey, this was really good. hmmmm..... what should i say?? well, this was realllllly good! ~samantha~ |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Thank you. Ok..thats all I have to say. *Allison* |
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