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Teen Poetry #6

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Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2002-12-07 04:58 PM

You did this!
Cheater!
Deciever!
Imposter!

I can't wait
any longer,
I'm about to scream.

These feelings are
getting stronger,
I'm stuck in the scheme.

If you're
seeking salvation,
why are you looking here?

You must live
with your humiliation,
and face your fear.

You can't run away,
and hide
like you thought.

You're the one
who lied
and got caught.

Now you're
trapped
and can't get out.

And I'm the one who
snapped
there is no doubt.

You did this!
Liar!
Thief!
Player!

What You Can't Have- You Can't Resist

Smoothy
Member

since 2002-12-02

Posts 119
The dark side of the moon

1 posted 2002-12-07 05:16 PM

Whoah, slow down Sparky!! Lots of emotion in this one. Definitely a strong piece.

Love conquers all, so I must be in a losing battle.

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

2 posted 2002-12-07 07:59 PM

thank u

What You Can't Have- You Can't Resist

Jaime

Registered

Member
Posts 250

3 posted 2002-12-07 11:46 PM

Hello punctuation. (!!!!!!!) That's cool though. I dig it. Shows passion.

Reminds me of Hamlet somehow.. you know, "The Mousetrap". Made me smile.

Anywho, I like the overall intensity of this poem. How you seem to be yelling with reckless abandon at whomever it is that pissed you off.

Good write.

- Jaime

i was here

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