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WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
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0 posted 2002-12-06 12:51 PM


Forever Alone

I am forever alone
She cries
Only her heart echos back
And the night stars disappear from the sky
Leaving her surrounded by black
Her soul sheds the tears that her eyes won't reveal
Feeling only sadness deeper than the sky
Emptiness more hollow than the black night
The unshed tears burning trails down her cheeks
Faded memories
Too often relived
Pushing to the surface
They don't bring comfort now
As the dawn starts filling the sky
She whispers once more
I am forever alone
And the dawn brings only more darkness with it.


WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change? -Dishwalla-

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devinechild22
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since 2002-08-28
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1 posted 2002-12-06 06:52 PM


This was very well written. Good one!
           *Allison*

HopelessRomanticGuy
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since 2001-08-17
Posts 495
LI, New York
2 posted 2002-12-06 08:20 PM


I agree that this was extremely well written, but very sad.  Are you okay?  Y'know, your not alone, 'Wren.  If you ever need to talk, I'm here, even if just to comiserate or whatever.  I more often than not feel the same way, one of the reasons I started writing.  Well anyway, just thought I'd let you know I'm here, and to say I'm not THAT good!  There's no need to *bow* to me! LOL  Besides, I'm sure your much cuter standing up!  Grr... In the words of my good friend Bryan, "That was my evil side.  Now excuse me WHILE I KICK IT'S ARSE!"  Lol!  Just trying to lighten the mood!  Later!

                                                        Rich

"You can't hurt meee!!  'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!"

Star T
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since 2002-07-12
Posts 182
Philadelphia, US
3 posted 2002-12-06 08:44 PM


my GOD winterwren u are such a talent. i feel u so much.its like i'm reading my story rite there.i love u even without knowing u.is this how u feel inside?or its just another poem?i really would like to know.i also want u to know, i'm here if u need a friend. that is the bestest and deepest reaching poem i've read in a long long time.i'll keep watching out for u.and reply me to my email if u want.i'll be waiting...

"her soul shed the teaes her eyes wont reveal."

"and the night stars disappear from the sky"

those lines were awesome and so sad.i actually have a deep feeling for the stars and i cant begin to imagine it disappearing from the sky.i actually once wrote a poem on that once.ok i think i'm talking too much.holla back!


Rainbowdust
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since 2002-12-05
Posts 320
Sydney, Australia
4 posted 2002-12-06 11:46 PM


Her soul sheds the tears that her eyes won't reveal

I absolutely adored this poem! You must have a lot of courage to open yourself up and feel things so deeply... a friend once told me, "You're only alone when no one understand you".. and from the replies you've received so far, I don't think you'll ever be alone...

The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears.

WinterWren
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5 posted 2002-12-07 02:36 AM


Thank you all for your comforting replies! You are all so precious and kind.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change? -Dishwalla-

Smoothy
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since 2002-12-02
Posts 119
The dark side of the moon
6 posted 2002-12-07 04:40 PM


This reminds me of this one time I was looking up into the starry night and I wondered to myself, where'd my ceiling go?lol. All kidding aside this ws a very well written if sad piece. I agree with Rich, you probably are cuter standing up. Sorry, 'bout that.lol

Bryan

Love conquers all, so I must be in a losing battle.

Ephraim
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since 2002-12-07
Posts 24

7 posted 2002-12-07 06:43 PM


For some, lonliness is not the curse, but an enjoyed blessing.

The poem, poet, is superb.

~Ephraim

xxxnuttyangelxxx
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since 2002-12-06
Posts 72
New York
8 posted 2002-12-08 08:09 PM


Great poem, looking foward to reading more of your work. thanks

shea

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