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LTEvans
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since 2002-12-06
Posts 72
Lenham, England

0 posted 2002-12-06 10:09 AM



Colourless

Standing in a trench at the edge of the world,
All the colours of the rainbow give way,
To a dull, cold grey,
Talking in paint will not wash away.
The void in which we stand,
The walls that tower above,
Look like that they can not stand,
As they lean in over me,
Crumbling down around my face.

The world begins, world ends,
From the start to the finish,
Single cell through to human hell,
Primary cause to terminal flaw,
Sun rises, sun sets,
Born is, dies as.

Am I sinking in too far,
I would not know,
I looked at the stars for too long,
I think I will overload,
Opus of experience I lost,
Because my head has just overflowed,
One word and everyone changes,
Synapse reorganized after years of  pacification,
And your thoughts are alien to yourself.

What goes up must come down,
If he stays low he must not rise,
Stranded on the bottom rung,
In your place stay put,
Take a chance on complacency,
Because there are no human genies.

There are no perfect forms,
You can think no further than your head,
In which the world you contain,
Diluted and frozen to fit,
A pale reflection on greasy water,
In which everyone is frozen in pain,
As though a thousand fractured images,
Are snapped together to create one.

What we see can not be truth,
Lies are born in excess myth,
If revelation was made for humans,
Then so was misdirection,
You can not keep your way,
On islands of perception.

© Copyright 2002 LTEvans - All Rights Reserved
Jaime
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1 posted 2002-12-06 10:34 AM


Beautiful poem. You don't see much like this here.

Perception is something I bat around a lot and toil with. Silver curls...

Welcome to pip.

Jaime


i was here

[This message has been edited by Jaime (12-06-2002 10:36 AM).]

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
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2 posted 2002-12-06 01:02 PM


That was an amazing first post! You are very talented! I immensly enjoyed reading that poem. I'll be looking for more of yours.
Laugh often, love much, live well.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change? -Dishwalla-

Star T
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since 2002-07-12
Posts 182
Philadelphia, US
3 posted 2002-12-06 08:33 PM


"if revelation was made for humans,
then so was misdirections"

"i looked at the stars for too long,
i think i will overload"

those lines stood out amongst the other also beautiful ones.ur poetry is so nice and different in its own special way.i happen to have an obsession with the stars and moon too thats probably why that other line appealed to me.

i'll be on the look out 4 u...


HopelessRomanticGuy
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since 2001-08-17
Posts 495
LI, New York
4 posted 2002-12-06 08:53 PM


Holy ****!!! *falls out of chair, nearly spilling Iced Tea all over himself*  THAT'S *points at poem*  a FIRST POST!  Now THAT'S something you don't see everyday!  THat was a wonderful poem!  *smacks forehead*  Where are my manners?

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!


There, now that that's settled, I can go back to gaping in awe!  *gapes*

                                                             Rich

Rainbowdust
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since 2002-12-05
Posts 320
Sydney, Australia
5 posted 2002-12-06 11:42 PM


You grabbed my attention with the title, being as obsessed with colour as my sn indicates lol.. but you kept my attention with your incredible talent!

One word and everyone changes,
Synapse reorganized after years of  pacification,
And your thoughts are alien to yourself.

I've felt that so many times and have never quite been able to express it... I really enjoyed your poem; hope there are plenty more where it came from!

The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears.

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