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lilibeelee Member
since 2001-07-12
Posts 143 |
Am I looking in a miror with only an image i can see? Lashes pefect,skin so flawless,makeup perfected Told its too much, i think its just fine Riding on the truth of such a fine line I try to make things better,better for them to see I keep trying and crying, it just is not me to be so perfect in the world of imperfction a dab here and there to hide a perfect complection covering what is already beautfull,hiding a face I dont let them see the tears, i hide each and every trace hurt not just once but too many to count my soul is screaming to be let out not perfect enough,not perfect for you Im told its to much you look so pretty but here I am wondering if what you say is true seven years old, a cold hospital floor a mother is crying,as she prays and shuts the door they found not just one not two or three they found many more imperfect things on me i look for help but not knowing where to turn i need someone to understand, i pray and urn eleven years later feeling the affects sitting on my floor, thinking as i reflect is this me or is it all them when does this jugment come to an end my heart is hurt,my body is weak my mind is screaming, but you wont hear a peep you see the perfect girl living in this perfect world |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
quote: maybe it's time you do let them see Lisa.. too many people go through this, what's wrong with letting someone help you? you're loved ones will be there for you. i really liked this write. i felt you had a lot of strong emotion in it. you portrayed the images and story line very well. keep writing. “A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.” |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was awesome. I loved the words you used..it seems like you went very deep with this poem. I can relate to it a lot so it also appeals to me a lot in that way. Overall i think you did a great job. Wonderful  Standing on the edge of the world |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
lilibeelee~ There is so much pain and frustration wrapped up in this powerful write. I felt every word of this as I read. Very well done. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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