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palmerj
Junior Member

since 2002-11-06

Posts 30
Coxsackie, NY

0 posted 2002-12-03 09:08 PM

w
a
  n
   t
    i
     n
      g
to feel
your lovely touch

n
e
  e
   d
    i
     n
      g
a place
in your heart

l
o
  v
   i
    n
     g
is more
than just a crutch

s
i
  g
   h
    i
     n
      g
as you
begin to part

f
r
  o
   m

     m
      e

I saw some other poems on here in this type of format and thought I would give it a go

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

1 posted 2002-12-03 09:35 PM

Interesting format I really like it though. Well I really like this piece and I can't wait to read more. Keep up the awsome work.
Lauren

Smoothy
Member

since 2002-12-02

Posts 119
The dark side of the moon

2 posted 2002-12-03 09:40 PM

Yeah, that is a neat format. Good use of it too.

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

3 posted 2002-12-03 10:18 PM

crutch? or crush?

good poem btw loved the style

Ri

Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you......

Stinky Twinkie
Member

since 2002-11-26

Posts 204
Dinwiddie

4 posted 2002-12-03 10:44 PM

that's a uhhh...interesting format. good job

-Stinky Twinkie-

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

5 posted 2002-12-04 05:01 PM

palmerj~
I like this piece very much.
I enjoyed your words and the format
was very effective in this case.
Nicely done.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

stephanie
Junior Member

since 2002-11-15

Posts 33

6 posted 2002-12-04 06:30 PM

i agree with everyone else....good use of the format! and very good poem....short but very good!....cant wait to read more. crystal

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

7 posted 2002-12-04 10:01 PM

I've seen this format before and have to say you use it VERY well! It made for an extremely enjoyable, break from the norm, poem! Keep on writin'!

Rich

"You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!"

PrincessNets
Member

since 2002-10-30

Posts 103
NewYork, USA

8 posted 2002-12-05 09:41 AM

Great Poem. I really like the format you used. Can't wait to read more.

-Jeanette-

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