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Darkness
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since 2002-10-17
Posts 202
The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies.

0 posted 2002-12-03 06:20 PM


Something notorious...
You better check who you trust,
Because most people aren't as they appear,
They really wanna slit you from ear to ear,
They tell you things you can't help but believe,
They prey on you because you're naive.

Something notorious...
Watch out or it's you they'll bust,
They've done it to more people like you,
Telling you things just too good to be true,
Give them a chance and they'll take all you got,
They take from you because your all they're not.

Something notorious...
They don't love you, and its pretty obvious,
They told you they are your best friend,
That they will be with you 'till the bitter end,
When you wake up face down they're not in sight,
Dark is there because they even stole your light.

Something notorious...
In this game you weren't victorious,
People took you for all you had,
You're all alone with nothing and they're glad,
If you just open you eyes you can see,
The person you should have trusted in was me.

© Copyright 2002 Sam Prond - All Rights Reserved
Smoothy
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since 2002-12-02
Posts 119
The dark side of the moon
1 posted 2002-12-03 06:28 PM


Betrayal. Dark and gloomy at its best. Good job and nice way to wrap it up at the end.
WinterWren
Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
2 posted 2002-12-03 07:59 PM


Great poem, really captured my feelings! Don't think you could do any better with this one!

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change? -Dishwalla-

HopelessRomanticGuy
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since 2001-08-17
Posts 495
LI, New York
3 posted 2002-12-03 08:15 PM


Dark and brooding, not to mention pessemistic.... what?  A poem?  No, those are my feelings tonight... I won't delve into why.  LOL  It was a great poem, and sadly very true.  I've been used before.. I know how true it is.  
                                        
                                                                               Rich

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