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JenniX
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since 2003-06-05
Posts 29


0 posted 2003-06-11 10:44 AM


I once dreamed of death,
but now I dream of hope,
of life, of love.
It never comes,
only death seeks me out,
for I have no life to live,
but only to fall in the gates of hell.
I seek the golden gates,
of heaven,
but am pushed away by the golden angels.
I am unwanted, unneeded,
nobody loves me, wants me.
I am a lost soul,
betrayed by life,
wlcomed by death.
Life is filled with boredom, betrayals,
where death is happiness,
filled with hope.
The blood flowing from my body,
turns my skin blue,
finally my dream seeks me out,
gives me hope and happpiness,
sends my soul to hell,
where I was destined to belong.

© Copyright 2003 JenniX - All Rights Reserved
idleeyes86
Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 64
Somewhere over the rainbow
1 posted 2003-06-11 11:00 AM


Good first poem, i like the almost contradictory nature of it. One thing you may (or may not) take comfort from is that I have a philosophy that emotions aren't really ever bad, if we feel upset or lost it just serves as a new aspect of life that makes it more interesting. We watch sad movies and scary movies even though we may leave the cinema with tears in our eyes, because its all a mix of colour that forms our life. I've once compared sadness to the cymbal in the emotional orchestra, it may not be as sweet sounding as the flute or violin, but it plays its part in what becomes a rich piece of music. So chin up hun.
JenniX
Junior Member
since 2003-06-05
Posts 29

2 posted 2003-06-11 11:06 AM


Thanx for your reply I see what you meen. Talk later
JenniX

Deep_Inside
Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377
i can't stop hiding
3 posted 2003-06-11 12:57 PM


good post i liked how you showed how deep this pentrates i got chills keep posting
laurie
Member
since 2003-05-28
Posts 153
canada, ontario
4 posted 2003-06-11 04:15 PM


l like it, jen... odd style you have here.
welcome to pips, l'm glad to see you finally getting out there.
laurie.

BrokenDreams
Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425
In The Clouds
5 posted 2003-06-11 04:32 PM


Welcome to PIP, have fun reading and replying.

This poem is sad and  kinda twisted. I like it. You've captured that crazy kind of confusion very well. Thanks for the read, I look forward to seeing more.
-Jenni

Oh yeah and I love your name.

If you listen hard enough silence can mean more than words.

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