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Light with Dark |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain 
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flare unto the majesty of light that shines from the billowing clouds the lights with which comes by to us into the useless shrouds what shall we do, us being people of no light and earthly needs i declare upon this land, a powerful choiceless creed dost* thou need my unrelentless help, the green turning brown under only we can hope, that water soon comes, and world does not plunder all the animals that we hoped would grow, are dieing under force of sun tiny ones with wobble legs, are leaving though its just begun down on hands and knees, i lift my head and pray above that you shall send down, a smile that carries upon it love taking care of all the land , and the roots that grow underneath and give thanks that as we are called roots, the green is recovering from the horrid sheath *I believe that is the proper thing, as Brian told me, but I think that so don't hold it to me because I don't think to often..... Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you...... [This message has been edited by Riley (11-30-2002 10:46 PM).] |
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Agean New Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 9 |
this is wonderful.. but felt more like reading a short letter or story.. just my opinion.. and that doesn't really matter.. |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
Agean: Sometimes poetry has a story line and is supposed to feel as such.....in fact doesn't all poetry have a story line. Well anyway thanks a lot for replying.  Riley LeAnne Grant Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you...... |
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Stinky Twinkie Member
since 2002-11-26
Posts 204Dinwiddie |
Riley: Is "dieing" anything like "dying"? -Stinky Twinkie- |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
Ok, so I can't spell....did I ever tell you that.? Any other comments on my poem? ( No I am not trying to be a smart aleic ( sp )Ri Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you...... |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
a dictionary could help you with that.  /jen/ i'm so bitterly disappointed. betty, i think it's time you leave now. |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
/jen/: This is true...but then again..whats a dictionary Riley Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you...... |
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