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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571
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Life is just a race We move at such a quick pace We miss our first taste Of lovers lips Kissing us so softly The hug the sweet,warm embrace Life`s just a race ____________________________________________________ Sara thought I was on drugs when I started typing this in our conversation...So I will post it to see what you all think..By the way....I don`t do drugs and never will...That stuff isn`t good for you! *Allison* |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
hey, this isnt dumb at all!! i really liked it i know some1 who does drugs and they r really cute (i think u no who i'm talkin bout) bu i dont like him cuz of that and i dontknow him but anywayz this was grrrrreat!! ~samantha~ "sometimes i just feel like |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
yea, don't be like Mike..and joey, and danny..and just about all of my new friends..god i need new friends, lol. Anyway- The only reason I said that was because it was so sudden.. just out of nowhere, ya kno? But i did like this,it was good, and... I kinda wish I didn't read it because I'm sad now.  Allison, u made me miss him. O crap, im getting social and personal. I'd better stop! |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
NOOOOOOOOOO I`ve liked Mike....gave up on that..I like Joey..but he does drugs...And Danny...he`s my friend and we were talkin really serious in science and he said he used to but he doesn`t anymore!!! I hope he wasn`t lyin to me...  *Allison* |
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foreverwithyou Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 204Wonderland |
how many of these have i not replied to?? i have missed such good poems!!ppl r prolly going to get mad at me and go"stop only repliying to your darling allison"but i couldnt give less cuz ur poemz r good and i can reply to whoevers i want!! ###CAthy### "I am who I am who I am who am I?" |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
This is good as well. Add some more to it. Strengthen it up a bit. Put more detail. Make the reader taste the kiss. |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Thanks for the reply Cathy and Kellie. *Allison* [This message has been edited by devinechild22 (12-14-2002 08:44 PM).] |
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