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PoeticGoddessOfDepression
Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

0 posted 2002-11-29 02:35 PM

(lol, i couldn't think of a name)
A softened melody
swings through my room.
Speaking of my love for you
Speaking of my crave for you.
Speaking of my
mistakes
I made with you.

I'm trying so hard to forget about
something I want to
always
remember.
I'm trying so hard not to miss
something I can
never
live without.
I'm trying so hard
to not be me-
Because you complete me...
And no,
I didn't just now find that out

(the last two lines are kinda an inside joke.. so yea.. lol)

"Close your eyes and begin to breathe.
Something's coming over me.
Lost to find, and a soul to keep.
Because you love me."
~finch~

[This message has been edited by PoeticGoddessOfDepression (11-29-2002 04:02 PM).]

dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

1 posted 2002-11-29 03:56 PM

hey,
i really liked this
dont forget him
this was really good tho and i dont no what to say so..
by bye and good poem
~samantha~

"sometimes i just feel like
quittin i still might
why do i put up this fight?
why do i still write?"

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

2 posted 2002-11-29 04:17 PM

This was really good! I don`t like the title though. It doesn`t fit the poem,missy! LOL
*Allison*

Stinky Twinkie
Member

since 2002-11-26

Posts 204
Dinwiddie

3 posted 2002-11-29 04:25 PM

I think the title is absolutely incredible. I like to call it creativity at its best. (sorry, I'm a smart ass today) The last stanza was nothing short of extraordinary, and a little on the philosophical side I thought. On a scale of 1-10, I give you two thumbs up

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

4 posted 2002-11-29 04:31 PM

Sam- don't worry.. I can't.

Allison- o0o, they suit eachother just fine.
Stinky- I don't mind...you better be careful, though.. because I tend to bite tumbs...grr!

Thanks everyone!!!
(i'd be my funny self, but I can't because /jen/ doesn't want me to be social, and gossip, and talk about personal things.. I SWEAR, i'm not usually this boring!!)

"How could u turn me into this?
Right after u just taught me how to kiss u!?
I told u I'd never say good-bye.
Now I'm slipping on the tears u made

[This message has been edited by PoeticGoddessOfDepression (11-29-2002 04:32 PM).]

quik
Member

since 2002-11-27

Posts 91
Dinwiddie,Virginia

5 posted 2002-11-29 04:46 PM

Very different. thats what make it so unique. Very good. keep it up

Agean
New Member

since 2002-11-29

Posts 9

6 posted 2002-11-30 10:20 AM

very good..not a flaw.. the tittle should but a nickname for the guy this is about.. or his real name.. but thats to obvious..my opinion.. not important..

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