my post - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Agean
New Member

since 2002-11-29

Posts 9

0 posted 2002-11-29 09:13 AM

Many months I stayed awake, to try and make, sence of your absence,

It's been so long, that I've forgotten how you felt within my arms,

The sunlight waste, upon this place, without you here to play,

the night time stories, lost it's glories since you left me on that day,

I lived enough that I won't miss, anything but your sweet kiss,

but how dare of god to take you first, when you lived so litttle since your birth,

My tears soaked upon your bed, next to all the books we read,

and all your toys that's on the floor, will lay there still, forever more,

and I will stay awake again, until i see the light that will take me to you in heaven.

Agean
New Member

since 2002-11-29

Posts 9

1 posted 2002-11-29 09:16 AM

a poem not about me or anyone close.. i just wanted to see if i can maybe understand how someone would feel if this were to happen...

clve527
Member

since 2002-07-08

Posts 200

2 posted 2002-11-29 11:18 AM

Please proofread. And I don't think that this is one never ending sentence.

Casey

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

3 posted 2002-11-29 11:23 AM

Please don't change this, it is perfect as it is and a very enjoyable read

Welcome to Passions

Andrew

Insert Sig here

[This message has been edited by Marshalzu (11-29-2002 11:23 AM).]

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2002-11-30 12:29 PM

Agean~
I very much enjoyed this piece.
You've done a great job of expressing the emotion
and heartache and I felt this all the way through.
Very nicely penned.
Welcome to Passions! I hope to see lots more from you.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

5 posted 2002-11-30 03:08 PM

hey,
this was really good.
welcome!!
and dont stop postin
~samantha~

"sometimes i just feel like
quittin i still might
why do i put up this fight?
why do i still write?"

wvplayernotreally
Member

since 2002-11-06

Posts 215
yakima wa

6 posted 2002-11-30 07:07 PM

I loved it as is! Welcome to Passions by the way. Even though you have never done this you have such a voice and imagination. its great.

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.