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Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
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Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2002-11-27 03:51 PM



S
e
  e
   t
    h
     i
      n
       g
with pain,
that won't
go away.

T
o
  r
   m
    e
     n
      t
       e
        d
by thoughts
of losing
you today

              R
             e
            w
           i
          n
         d
your thoughts.
and lose.   control.
            

What You Can't Have- You Can't Resist

© Copyright 2002 Staci Weidner - All Rights Reserved
branden726
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1 posted 2002-11-27 08:21 PM


Great write! Love the Style!

Riley
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in the pouring rain
2 posted 2002-11-28 10:54 PM


wow, i thought i had replied to this, guess not....well anywhoo....i realyl like the style you chose to write this in...good job

Riley

Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you......

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
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Somewhere... out there...
3 posted 2002-11-30 12:03 PM



Spine Grinder~
I REALLY like this one!
This is definately my favorite of yours so far.
Not only is this a very well written piece, but
you've formatted it wonderfully to.
VERY nicely done.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

snoduck
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since 2002-11-15
Posts 99
Selah, WA
4 posted 2002-11-30 04:48 PM


I have to admit, the style you wrote this is beautiful. It shows a certain uniqueness (if thats even a word) that I haven't had the chance to see much of.  Great write!

-Erica-

Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
5 posted 2002-12-01 01:34 AM


thanks everyone, i'm glad u all liked it.

What You Can't Have- You Can't Resist

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