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lil cherry
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since 2002-10-02
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Ont, Can.

0 posted 2002-11-26 10:13 PM


I want to be heard
I need people to hang on to my every word
I want others to stare at me in amazement
Instead of disgust
I want them to remember what I’ve said
As if it changed their lives
I want them to see beauty in what I write
I want them to long to understand
Instead of just brushing me aside
I want to capture their souls using only my own
I want to be loved and admired
To have people watch me in envy
I want them to remember my voice
As if it were one of an angel
I want to see smiles on people’s faces
And be proud to know I caused them
I want to see tears in people’s eyes
And be proud to know I moved them
I want to sing
I want to write
I just want to be heard
I want everyone to know what I’m thinking
But still be mysterious
And remain a part of the shadows I call home
I hold secrets but some of them want to escape
Why can’t they get the chance?
Why won’t people listen?
I just want to be heard

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Star T
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since 2002-07-12
Posts 182
Philadelphia, US
1 posted 2002-11-27 09:34 PM


hey lil cherry,
i loved your poem.it was deep and definitely original.i have comment on ur poem though,u'll be heard when u stop wanting to be heard.and by the way,u are heard already,thats why i'm replying u...

keep up the good job! keep writing and being u...soon,u'll be really heard.

Jesus loves u...


Riley
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2 posted 2002-11-28 10:30 PM


I like this but with all the i's and stuff it kinda took away....maybe revise this and take out some i's ( don't that sound a little weird ) LOL otherwise I liked this piece...


Riley

Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you......

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