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roxywrestlegirl04 Member
since 2002-10-29
Posts 74good ole DINWIDDIE |
is the ocean ever living or does it die when the beautiful waves crash down do they cry the ocean goes through hardships like we do in our lives harsh storms peaceful times getting hung up in the fishing lines sometimes its easy sometimes its hard sometimes some people cant get very far but we live and learn and we make mistakes sometimes we get burned but we do what it takes we go through the harsh storms and the peaceful times we get hung up in the fishing lines but thats life and thats death its all of these things we have to stick together no matter what life brings |
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Stinky Twinkie Member
since 2002-11-26
Posts 204Dinwiddie |
that is very good. You are an excellent poet, I would like to meet you one day. Do you wrestle? I was just wondering. A snow man just barked at me and I wet myself. -Stinky Twinkie- |
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stephanie Junior Member
since 2002-11-15
Posts 33 |
hey liz its crystal you already know that i love ur poem just thought that id write ya nd tell ya again...bye babe |
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Honey Member
since 2001-10-09
Posts 92Hot girl From Canada |
I can totally relate to this i just wrote a similar poem. keep up the awesome work It Feels As If I've Always Been Someone On The Outside Looking In. |
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lildevil Junior Member
since 2002-11-21
Posts 47missouri,usa |
i really liked this it really makes you think especially when you can so easily tell you know thats how life really is |
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rxyfxy04 Member
since 2002-11-26
Posts 54lil' town in Virginia |
hey liz.. its nicole.. u already know i LOVE your poems!! love ya girl..  RxyFxy04 |
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clve527 Member
since 2002-07-08
Posts 200 |
The lack of punctuation made this extremely hard to navigate through. And please learn the difference between its and it's. Casey |
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roxywrestlegirl04 Member
since 2002-10-29
Posts 74good ole DINWIDDIE |
the lack of punctuation is purposful!! i didnt do it on accident...and i KNOW the difference oc the two! it is called "personal preference!" |
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clve527 Member
since 2002-07-08
Posts 200 |
No it's not personal preference. It's means it is. Its is the possesive its. My gosh... And this piece does stand well without punctuation regardless of what all the people who repeatedly say "I love this" are saying. Casey |
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Stinky Twinkie Member
since 2002-11-26
Posts 204Dinwiddie |
When it comes to grammar, "personal preference" does not exist. "Its" and "it's" aren't even close in meaning. You need to use them in the correct way because if someone doesn't know that it is "purposful", (check the spelling of that too while you're at it, I believe there's an "e" in there somewhere) you may come across as unintelligent (for lack of a better term). you're gonna be mad at me now aren't you? |
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Jester Junior Member
since 2002-08-13
Posts 41The dark corners of your mind |
I'm sorry to stop the bickering in this post..but there is no such thing as it's. Its never has an appostrophe...it is always just its. Now for the poem ... I really enjoyed it. The repetition of: harsh storms peaceful times getting hung up in the fishing lines makes its stronger and gives an impact. I liked the fishing lines too...it gave me a new way to look at htings.. Thanx for the read!! I am your God, will you kill me now or shall I be continually suicidal? |
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clve527 Member
since 2002-07-08
Posts 200 |
Actually you are entirely wrong. Get your information straight, because the more you say things like that the more people may doubt your education. Casey |
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roxywrestlegirl04 Member
since 2002-10-29
Posts 74good ole DINWIDDIE |
sorry for the "bickering".....i just like to write my poetry the way i like to write it....not the way everyone else wants me too...whether it is wrong or rite...lol...but thanx for tryin to correct me...."stinky twinky" im NOT gonna be mad at you...i LOVE you too much...JUST KIDDING...lol...thanx for the help...im stubborn so i prolly wont listen......but thanx anywayz!! LIZ |
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rxyfxy04 Member
since 2002-11-26
Posts 54lil' town in Virginia |
haha.. we all know liz can bicker.. lol. just playing girl. chill out!! love ya.. bye bye RxyFxy04 |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
**looks curiously at everyone** nice ri Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you...... |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Nice job Liz. I think it's great. (Yes, "it's" as in "it is". LOL) But I'll just leave it at "Nice job" as to avoid the arguement over correct punctuation. This could get ugly (Just kidding!) *Me* |
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