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michaels_gurl
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0 posted 2002-11-25 04:08 PM


The wind blowing softly to untouched melodies
Cradling my spirit, rocking it gently
Floating high on winds
Soaring, gliding through the billowy clouds
Ascending toward the sun
Falling toward the sea and pulling up
At the last moment

My soul is a beautiful, growing garden
Flowers bloom, expanding in all their glory
Trees looking over like silent guardians
The moon looking over and smiling at all

Stars dot the endless black sky
Glittering and winking
Laughing as people look up at their beauty
Many searching for life's answers under them
Pain becomes a distant memory
Sorrow is drawn in beauty
All is still, but nothing stops moving


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1 posted 2002-11-25 11:34 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!

The imagery and the emotion in this was amazing...great job...i can tell your no amateur at this...i hope you enjoy it here Thanks for posting!!

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knightlyshadows
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2 posted 2002-11-26 06:38 AM


loved these two lines:
"Cradling my spirit, rocking it gently"
and
"Sorrow is drawn in beauty"
beautiful imagery here.
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vlraynes
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3 posted 2002-11-29 04:13 PM



michaels_gurl~
What a beautiful entrance into Passions this is.
I love the whole 'feel' of this and the imagery is wonderful.
I enjoyed this very much.
Welcome to Passions!  I hope to see lots more from you.
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you have not truly met the poet.
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4 posted 2002-11-29 04:30 PM


Welcome to Passions

I must say that I loved the imagery in this one

No, on second thought, let's not go to Camelot.
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Star T
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5 posted 2002-11-29 08:37 PM


these lines are deep..

"sorrow is drawn in beauty,
all is still but nothing stops moving."

especially the last line.i'm really impressed at the depth of ur expressions.keep it up!


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6 posted 2002-11-29 11:19 PM


Good job on this one.  The "cradling.....rocking..." line was pretty good.  
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