Teen Poetry #6 |
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lone_poet707 Member
since 2001-11-17
Posts 70black hole named Aylmer |
Did I really fail this time? This guilty concience is such a crime. Gazed at the past's reflection like a mirror's connection. This evolution reveals and shocks, waves goodbye with a smirking mock. How much longer til I hit the edge? Thoughts balancing reason's ledge, pondering accusations and "what ifs" rips away and creates a rift. Did I really fail this time? This guilty concience is a heavy crime. |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
This was a good write Joe. You did well on the rhyme scheme and flow. Nice topic as well. I especially liked these two lines: quote: Keep posting. btw, who named your black hole eh? “A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.” |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Joe~ This is a nicely penned piece. I very much enjoyed both the content and the flow. Well done. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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