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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Hey everyone. It's been awhile since I last posted here---so, I hope I'm not rusty. Anyways...this poem is incredibly personal to me, so I'd REALLY be happy if you didn't critique this one. (I don't feel like having my feelings judged) Xero- Back when, summers were great… We used to stay out, till it was late. People used to say, we were brothers, You were my best friend; like no other. Livin’ it out, as time passes us by… I’m left here with nothin’ now, So I just sit here and cry… Separated at birth, with different moms… Grade 7 was a magical year; we were the bomb. Always together, man. Hangin’ out… You were my best friend---without a doubt. I wouldn’t give you the respect you deserved, But your cries for help---were never unheard. Even when you were kicked out of your house, I took you on my shoulders, ain’t nothin’ to cry about. (At least…I want to say that) Back when, summers were great… We used to stay out, till it was late. People used to say, we were brothers, You were my best friend; like no other. Livin’ it out, as time passes us by… I’m left here with nothin’ now, So I just sit here and cry… Stormin’ the area; in all kinds of weather, We’d made plans to be friends forever… Forever’s come and gone… We were a team; ain’t nuttin’ go wrong. You were there for me, more than I was for you… With you there; I was always pullin’ through. Never did I once, give you what you deserved. But I was backin’ you, man. Every single word. (I really mean it…) People used to say, we were brothers, You were my best friend; like no other. Livin’ it out, as time passes us by… I’m left here with nothin’ now, So I just sit here and cry… Girls hurt you and you dropped outta school. But to me, you were never a fool. To me, you were always doin’ what was right. Because it made you happy; I never wanted to fight. I wanted to be like you…and follow my heart. I never said it, but you were right from the start. Even in my shadow, you grew into a man. Watered with rage; You followed your plans. (But, you never knew where you were going…) Livin’ it out, as time passes us by… I’m left here with nothin’ now, So I just sit here and cry… Marta, Kateryna and Sarah… You took my tears, and threw them into the air… And yet, I couldn’t be there for you…I hate that. Making eachother smile; we were good at that. You lay there, after poppin’ 25 pills… The thought of losin’ you man, gives me chills. But, I was there for you then…watchin’ you, dead. I was there for you; and heard what you said… (“Even though you’re younger---you’ve always been like an older brother to me…”) So I just sit here and cry… [This message has been edited by Android 17 (11-24-2002 05:32 AM).] |
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NSnaomian Member
since 2002-07-22
Posts 232In my troll closet I be |
Wow, that was very deep and I'm sorry for your loss, but sometimes people don't want to hear that...so, I'm glad you wrote this and shared this with everyone. I have to say, I know what its like to lose a friend, but not like that, mine can still come back and stay, yours can't. Thanks for sharing, must be hard. Laura "I have seen what a laugh can do. It can transform almost unbearable tears into something bearable, even hopeful." |
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Android 18 Member
since 2002-02-20
Posts 61Austrailia (My DreamLand) |
Beautiful words for such a sad story... Beautifully written. -Serena |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Remember Garrett, Serena? Rayndpnugah; ruf luimt E ajan pa cu cdibet... |
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rimmie Junior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 45Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
~RuZ~ [This message has been edited by rimmie (11-24-2002 06:07 PM).] |
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rimmie Junior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 45Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
All I can really say is that I loved this poem and thought it to be extremelly powerfull and well writen. I know how much he means to you and you experessed it well.  Great Job ~RuZ~ |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Awww...thanks babe! Both of your replies brought tears to my eyes! :P Rayndpnugah; ruf luimt E ajan pa cu cdibet... |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
i liked this small insight into you Alex. im here for you if you want to talk. youve got my msn. *cuddle* hope youre alright babe. tiff “A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.” |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Hey Tiff! Thanks! Actually, I have a different address now! kasai_dc@hotmail.com Rayndpnugah; ruf luimt E ajan pa cu cdibet... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Alex~ There is so much of your heart in this piece. You've done an beautiful job of expressing your love and admiration for your friend. Thank you for sharing this more personal piece of 'you'. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
No need for quotations Vicky, this is me...plain and simple. Rayndpnugah; ruf luimt E ajan pa cu cdibet... |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Heh...just me lookin' back on this. Sobbing wreck, as usual... Rayndpnugah; ruf luimt E ajan pa cu cdibet... |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
Had to read this one again....  Are you scared? |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Thanks for the re-read! I really appreciate it! |
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