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PrincessNets Member
since 2002-10-30
Posts 103NewYork, USA |
Most of the time i write poetry that is happy and lovey-dovey, but I wanted to post this poem to show that I do have a different side to me. Hope you like it!  See my tears coming down Only for you. See my body torn apart Only because of you. My heart is being ripped in two. See me bleeding here before you. See all the pain this put me through. Watch me bleeding along with you. Bleeding because of the pain, Your death has put me through. [This message has been edited by PrincessNets (11-22-2002 09:43 AM).] |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
i liked this PN, especially the last two lines. But i felt it was too short. maybe you could add a bit to it? go into more depth.  good write, keep posting. and it doesnt always have to be lovey dovey. “A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.” Getting away, isn't Running away. "The hurt that you try to hide, is killing me." [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (11-23-2002 06:21 PM).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
PrincessNets~ There's a lot of intense emotion in this piece and you've expressed it very well and quite powerfully. Very well penned. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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