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dinky
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0 posted 2002-11-21 06:01 PM


why do we always fight?
i just want to make everything alright
and when we say good night,  
think about the day,
and know all the bad memories were washed away
if only you knew the real me,
then you could see
the pain in my eyes
and why every night i cry
i'm beginning to drown
as you see the frown,
on my face,
and realize the path that i'll choose to take

"sometimes i just feel like
quittin i still might
why do i put up this fight?
why do i still write?"

© Copyright 2002 samantha rae - All Rights Reserved
foreverwithyou
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since 2002-10-20
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1 posted 2002-11-21 06:10 PM


this was pretty good G !!!  yea john was so0o0 kewl today he flung a yellow scrunchy at me !!!!!lol anywayz liked this !!

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

[This message has been edited by foreverwithyou (11-21-2002 06:10 PM).]

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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2 posted 2002-11-21 06:19 PM


This was good, G!!
Jon was s0o0o0o gay today, he completly ignored me.

j/j (sorta)

ne way.. yea, i liked this.. who's it about? yo momma?
lol

ttyl

(i have nice lips... lol)

"I let you, just a million times. I love you even though it isn't fair."

Ina
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3 posted 2002-11-21 09:39 PM


i liked the poem...but they rythms seemed to cut the poem up. anyways
good work
regina

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4 posted 2002-11-21 09:48 PM


This reminds me of how i was with my boyfriend for a while...i know exactly how you feel...nicely written. Hope things get better for you

Standing on the edge of the world
Now I don’t want you to catch me
I want you to let me
Stand up here and walk on my own

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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5 posted 2002-11-22 05:17 PM


sam... why dont u reply ur replies? lol

"Thats what you get for falling again, you can never get him out of your head. It's the way that he makes you cry.
The way, that he's on your mind.

devinechild22
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6 posted 2002-11-22 05:38 PM


Wow sam...good one....Srry I didnt reply sooner...I havent been on here in a while..LOL
     *Allison*

Alone Afraid n' Away
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7 posted 2002-11-22 07:27 PM


this was a good one man!
PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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8 posted 2002-11-22 07:54 PM


sam...why dont u reply to ur replies, huh? huh??

Why isn't he calling me?? He has my number!!!
Oh, gee, wait... I know!!
Because I'm on the phone with you!!
Well- actually i'm not becaz u hung up on me..



(haha, that's my favorite smilie now..lol)

Close your eyes and begin to breathe. Something's coming over me. Lost to find, and a soul to keep. Because you love me...

branden726
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9 posted 2002-11-22 08:09 PM


This was great piece it had a rhyme scheme all the way through and it was just worded perfectly. Hope things get better
TopGunLauren
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10 posted 2002-11-23 04:51 AM


Nice poem I haven't been on here in a long time and it's nice to see people are still posting good poems.Keep up the good work!
  Lauren

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