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Ina
Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2002-11-20 08:58 PM


this isnt very good but oh well

The world is covered in snow
montreal is the place for a show
I wish for summer to last
all year long
ive been around awhile
faces changes often
but never really leaving
vented
cryed
smiled
art school is where i am
every day.
the sea intersts me
with her gentle swells
and awesome gails
sharks.
music is an outlet
loneliness is forgotten
occaisnally
i lurk around
reading but not always
replying
the snow has covered the world
and i have a lot to say
about it

Regina L.

© Copyright 2002 Regina Levy - All Rights Reserved
knightlyshadows
Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791
obscured vision
1 posted 2002-11-22 05:30 AM


in my opinion, this says it all:
quote:
loneliness is forgotten
occaisnally...
...the snow has covered the world
and i have a lot to say
about it

yup, i probably misconstrued(sp) it a bit, but that's how it read to me. very much enjoyed this regina. keep writing

“A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.”

Getting away, isn't Running away.

"The hurt that you try to hide, is killing me."

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
2 posted 2002-11-25 05:19 PM



Ina~
I beg to differ...I think this is VERY good.
I really love the whole feel of this piece and
enjoyed the little peek into your life.
I especially enjoyed...

    "the snow has covered the world
     and i have a lot to say
     about it"

And we're listening...
Nicely penned, Ina, and a great response to the challenge.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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