Challenge #3! (The Ellie Blues!)

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Challenge #3! (The Ellie Blues!)

EleanorMoonbaby
Member

since 2002-09-02

Posts 202
England, UK

0 posted 2002-11-20 12:49 PM

My name is Eleanor
But some call me Ellie-Jay
And I live in a cesspit
You may know it as Torbay.

I go to the 6th form
And I don't need to defend
The fact that I'm annoying
And don't have a lot of friends.

I worked in a post office
Before I got the sack
For wearing a T-shirt
With a cuss word on the back.

In love I'm unlucky
I've just been dumped again
I haven't got revenge yet
Although I try in vain.

My hair is brown and scruffy
My wardrobe left to chance
It's hard to look half-decent
With an ass the size of France.

So now this song is over
And I hope you understand
The reason I am here is cuz
I've got too much time on my hands!

OK, anyone play the harmonica? I see a song forming!
lol!
Ellie

High above the mucky-muck, castle made of clouds; there sits Wonderboy, sitting oh so proudly....

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

1 posted 2002-11-20 02:18 PM

*grins* hehehe well done on this one! The rhyme scheme was perfect, and it just sucked me right in from the very beginning

(Oh, and I think we all have too much time on our hands here lol)

I am a Knight who says Ni!

knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

2 posted 2002-11-20 08:29 PM

yup, you do suck. but thats ok, cuz i do too

i really liked this! it made me laugh. great flow and rhyme scheme. and you wrote it to make us smile and we still find out aboutcha. i think you passed this challenge with flyin colours.

keep writin and postin.
-tiff-

“A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.”

Getting away, isn't Running away.

"The hurt that you try to hide, is killing me."

EleanorMoonbaby
Member

since 2002-09-02

Posts 202
England, UK

3 posted 2002-11-21 04:57 PM

Heh! This poem is pure, concentrated crap, but hey, not every poem has to be serious! I couldn't be bothered with a serious attempt coz my muse is on sick leave. Ta!
Ellie

High above the mucky-muck, castle made of clouds; there sits Wonderboy, sitting oh so proudly....

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2002-11-25 12:15 PM

Ellie~
LOL! You're absolutely right. Not every poem
has to be serious and this one is great.
Great response to the challenge.
I enjoyed.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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