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PrincessNets
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0 posted 2002-11-20 09:25 AM



As I watch you sleep,
     I wonder when you will wake.
I long to see the white of your eyes,
     Yet I long to watch you sleep.
Never will you look as happy as you do now.
     I see you smile at your dream,
And as I watch you,
     I long for nothing more than to
Stand beside you in your dreams.
     In your dreams, there is no pain
Obstructing your eyes from mine,
     And nothing bad can happen.
In your dreams we are free to do as we please.
     As you awaken, you look into my eyes
As if you are still dreaming.
     You kiss me softly and into your dreams we go again.

© Copyright 2002 Jeanette Gabriele - All Rights Reserved
Darkness
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1 posted 2002-11-20 01:41 PM


The reference to the dreams really gave this piece a far away mood to it. It was really cool. If my girlfriend falls asleep in my arms I can't sleep because i just stare at her and wonder what she is dreaming about.

Very cool good write

Darkness

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2 posted 2002-11-20 11:04 PM


Aww this was so beautiful well written!

Standing on the edge of the world
Now I don’t want you to catch me
I want you to let me
Stand up here and walk on my own

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3 posted 2002-11-20 11:34 PM


this was a good write.  thanks for sharing.

just wanted to pop in and say welcome to passions.  

/jen/

i'm so bitterly disappointed.  betty, i think it's time you leave now.

vlraynes
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4 posted 2002-11-25 12:49 PM



PrincessNets~
Aren't dreams wonderful?
This is a beautifully written and romantic piece.
I enjoyed this very much.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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