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Teen Poetry #6

all i did was watch

theSunflower
Junior Member

since 2002-11-17

Posts 11

0 posted 2002-11-17 11:14 AM

I watched in horror as you slipped all the way down. I didn’t help you. I didn’t even try. I sit and did nothing I couldn’t even cry. I watched in horror as you lay in pain. I hurt, but not for you, as you. I felt it, through you. I couldn’t move. My thoughts inextricable, intense flashes of color took the place of emotions that I couldn’t understand, or maybe that I didn’t want to understand. I wanted so badly to solace you, to hold you, to bleed with you. But I couldn’t. I wanted so badly to run screaming into the safety of my car, drive away and never look back. But I couldn’t. I sat paralyzed, my mouth was dry, my eyes full of tears that would never get the chance to run down my cheek. I did nothing. NOTHING!!!

knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

1 posted 2002-11-20 06:13 AM

this made me think of how a mother would want to take the pain away from her child. you wrote this well, full of emotion. keep posting.

“A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.”

Getting away, isn't Running away.

"The hurt that you try to hide, is killing me."

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

2 posted 2002-11-20 11:39 PM

there was some very strong emotion in this piece and i thank you for sharing.

i enjoyed it.

perhaps when you have a chance you could check out the prose forum. you might enjoy yourself there, as this is rather borderline. but good write!!

welcome to passions!!

/jen/

i'm so bitterly disappointed. betty, i think it's time you leave now.

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