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ShadyMakaveli
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since 2002-08-21
Posts 128


0 posted 2002-11-17 04:12 AM


Got me feeling low
Am I wrong in my ways
A world i don't know
Searching for better dayz

Desires are unobtainable
Teared apart from inside
This pain is unexplainable
My dreams being denied

Cautious with my actions
Afraid of getting hurt
Caught up in distractions
Left alone in the dirt

Stuck battling my thoughts
Always taking a step back
Never peace, i'm distraught
My weaknesses under attack

Struggling to see the light
Making changes, yet no results
A past that wasn't done right
No one to blame, it's my fault


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wvplayernotreally
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since 2002-11-06
Posts 215
yakima wa
1 posted 2002-11-17 05:05 PM


hey I really like this. my favorite line was struggling to see the light. Any pointers sorry don't have any. you did a good job on this

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

Match
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since 2002-07-01
Posts 286
Canada Edmonton
2 posted 2002-11-17 05:21 PM


Im in love with this poem good job

YOUR INSULTS AND YOUR CURSES MAKE ME FEEL LIKE IM NOT A PERSON ~Staind~

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in the pouring rain
3 posted 2002-11-28 11:00 PM


nice vent


ri

Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you......

dinky
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since 2002-10-19
Posts 258

4 posted 2002-11-29 12:55 PM


hey,
i'm glad to see you posted again i really like reading ur poems
when i heard better dayz i automatically thought of the new tupac cd
this was good
keep postin
~samantha~

"sometimes i just feel like
quittin i still might
why do i put up this fight?
why do i still write?"

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