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0 posted 2002-11-15 03:14 AM



Your picture stares back at me
as I look into one wholly beautiful.
Time and it's demands may pull and plea,
but in the end I'm drawn to see.

The sight of you cements me inplace.

Do you know how beautiful you are?
Perhaps to cliched a phrase to
to do justice to your level, your bar.
Remember hearing of addicts with one tooth?

Their pain and fleeting joy?

No, no. For me, it's my money tree.
Seemingly to good to be real.
How is it you exist, how you be?
Why, love, do you even see me? Surreal.

Let alone know and fuel like no other.

Such a lovely woman you're becoming.
I'm scared to let you in.
Yet fearless. Yearning.
You warm the coldness that dwells beyond sway.
Love, I can't look away.

[This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (11-15-2002 03:16 AM).]

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1 posted 2002-11-15 01:59 PM


Your words are so strong..you really express yourself well..what can i say but it was a wonderful piece..I enjoyed it a lot!

Standing on the edge of the world
Now I don’t want you to catch me
I want you to let me
Stand up here and walk on my own

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2 posted 2002-11-15 08:22 PM


I like.

I'd say more, but I feel so stale right now. I'd not poison you with forced givings.

As I've said before though, I like the personal direction your poems have taken.

by the woods, you hear it creeping, and you know, they're the blood in you

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3 posted 2002-11-19 05:58 PM



Titus~
This is such a beautiful piece and heartfelt piece.
I'm really enjoying this more 'personal' side of your writing.
Can't wait to see more.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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4 posted 2002-11-19 09:22 PM


Ti... What can I say to this? I know I've been a while in replying, but I couldn't get past the first three lines for some reason. This is absolutely beautiful and totally heart-wrenching at the same time. The longing and desire is almost touchable in this poem.
*~* Nia

I am a Knight who says Ni!

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5 posted 2002-11-20 09:43 PM


What can I say, besides thank you?

~Titus

"A life unexamined is not worth living."
                       -Socrates

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