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Teen Poetry #6

Hang On

Darkness
Member

since 2002-10-17

Posts 202
The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies.

0 posted 2002-11-14 01:20 PM

Complications and confusions,
Like having to hang on,
To a rope covered with broken glass,
Your bloody palms and shattered trust,
But if you let go...
You simply perish.
What are you going to do?
You live life surrounded,
Engulfed in stress,
Enveloped in deliberate attempts,
At failure.
When your life’s,
Predictably unpredictable and,
Unpredictably predictable,
At the same time.
But you can't let go,
(Hang in there baby!)
Hold that rope,
And push through the pain,
Because at the end of the line,
There is a beam of light,
I like to call,
Happiness.

[This message has been edited by Darkness (11-15-2002 07:29 AM).]

wvplayernotreally
Member

since 2002-11-06

Posts 215
yakima wa

1 posted 2002-11-14 08:25 PM

This is good...really good. Hey just a little question for ya...whats your e-mail? you can post in on my next writing...or anyone of them.

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2002-11-14 11:09 PM

I really liked this piece. It was motivational

I especially liked these lines b/c they are so true..

"When your life’s,
Predictably unpredictable and,
Unpredictably predictable,
At the same time."

Thanks for sharing!

Standing on the edge of the world
Now I don’t want you to catch me
I want you to let me
Stand up here and walk on my own

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

3 posted 2002-11-19 05:10 PM

Darkness~
OH...I REALLY like this piece.
It is very well written and I just enjoyed the
whole feel of it and I love the positive ending.
Extremely well penned.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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