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Alone Afraid n' Away
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0 posted 2002-11-10 10:43 PM


    


As the the moon bagan to rise
over the ocean clear and blue
You slowly glanced into my eyes
Which what was next I hoped I knew
I turned to you, you turned to me
Just starring into eachother's eyes
When it happened I felt free
And you suddenly swept away all my cries
A kiss you gave me, no more no less
As the wind blew swiftly through my hair
When it happened I forgot all the rest
And just knowing you were there
That single night I'll never forget
the sunset and the stars
On a beach was where we met
While creating a night that was ours

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Alone Afraid n' Away
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1 posted 2002-11-10 10:49 PM


ok people who do reply PLEASE GO EASY
dont make me cry! j/p
thank you soooo much!!

Spine Grinder
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2 posted 2002-11-11 12:04 PM


Alot of emotions in this that u expressed well. i liked this, good job.

You can close your eyes to things you dont want to see,but u cant close your heart to things you dont want to feel.

SuperSonic
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3 posted 2002-11-11 07:56 AM


Awwww that is sooooo sweet. As a die hard romantic, (the last of a dying breed) I liked this a lot. Well done!
LoveBug
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4 posted 2002-11-11 02:29 PM


This is such a beautiful picture of a magical night! We all have that memory... *sigh*, lol! great imagery... I hope you're still with this person!!!

Most of us go to our grave with our music still inside of us.

devinechild22
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5 posted 2002-11-11 05:17 PM




Go katie! I loved it! You did awesome!

foreverwithyou
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6 posted 2002-11-12 06:00 PM


hey KT this was really kewl!!GUESS WHO BURPED AT ME YESTERDAY AND HE SAT ON THE TABLE NEXT TO ME TODAY!?!?!HEEEEEEEEEEHEEEEEE john tonkavich heehee anywayz yea i liked this

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

Skyfire
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7 posted 2002-11-12 09:35 PM


Awww

I am a Knight who says Ni!

clve527
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8 posted 2002-11-12 10:01 PM


For future reference, proof read.  It tends to throw people who are reading poetry for the sake of poetry off when there is a misspelling in the very first line.

Casey

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9 posted 2002-11-13 01:37 PM


I would be lying if i said that this was anything less than a beautiful write. Great use of imagery and i can't wait for that moment.

Chris

dinky
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10 posted 2002-11-13 10:17 PM


hey
katya or however u spell it in hawaiin(i think that is what u said)
this was really good
~samantha~

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