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Pollita
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since 2002-07-25
Posts 220
the unknown realm of insanity

0 posted 2002-11-10 12:57 PM



Hate, Cruel, Death.
All very important things.
About who I am,
It doesn’t matter to you.
All you know,
Is I’m here.
You always see me,
With my friends.
You assume that everything is fine,
But you soon will learn not to assume anything.
My life is complicated,
And yes I too have problems.
I’m the one,
Acting like nothing is wrong.
I like to hide,
From what I feel so I won’t be afraid.
What goes on in my mind,
Isn’t what you think.
I don’t dream of pretty things,
But instead I dream of happiness.
I don’t wish for jewellery,
I wish for a better life.
You think I love myself and I’m the only one who matters to me,
But your wrong because I most definitely don’t think that.
If you took a little bit of your time,
You should get to know me.
Then you’d know what I really think,
And what I feel.
For real I don’t love myself,
I look at myself in a way you’d never dream of.
I am troubled,
Although you see me as someone without a care in the world.
You say that I’m awesome,
And that I have every reason to be happy.
But I’m not in fact I’m not happy,
With who I am or what I am.
I should be perfectly fine,
With who I am…
But I’m not,
And never will be.
I wanted happiness,
For my friend and for myself.
It won’t happen,
Something always has to go wrong.
We will be normal again,
No matter what the others say.
I don’t mind what they think,
As long as they don’t get the wrong idea.
I would hope that one day soon,
I’ll be able to say that I love myself and the world I live in.


© Copyright 2002 Delaniie Quirk - All Rights Reserved
Local Parasite
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1 posted 2002-11-10 02:25 AM


Wow... what a deep, emotional and expressive piece.  You've let so much of yourself into this poem, it gives it a very profound element.

Great writing Delaney.  Keep it up.

Parasite

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
~Aldous Huxley

Pollita
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since 2002-07-25
Posts 220
the unknown realm of insanity
2 posted 2002-11-10 03:07 AM


Thank you Brian...Today was good/horrible.
I got my friend mad at me..and she wants me out of her life...completely!
Well i don't care...She wants to be snotty to me im gonna give her what she dishes out 10x worse!
Thank you sooooo much!
I'll try not to let this keep me down...
C ya!


rimmie
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since 2002-08-09
Posts 45
Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada
3 posted 2002-11-10 07:30 AM


Great peice! I really enjoyed it and will keep an eye out for the next one!!!

~RuZ~

[This message has been edited by rimmie (11-10-2002 07:30 AM).]

Riley
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since 2002-07-18
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in the pouring rain
4 posted 2002-11-10 10:48 AM


Good job Delaney. It was very emotional, as mentioned above * looks upward * see...good job


Riley

And I don't HATE ur poetry

~*I found how to laugh, forgot how to smile, somehow your words, make it all worthwhile*~

Pollita
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since 2002-07-25
Posts 220
the unknown realm of insanity
5 posted 2002-11-10 11:21 AM


Aww thank you guys...I need someone to lean on right now...I can't believe that Jessi would say that about Derrick....Ah it doesn't matter as long as I think Derrick is awesome then it shouldn't matter what she thinks...!
Yes I put ALOT of my heart into this one.
And that's why I'm sure that it's okay!

Darkness
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since 2002-10-17
Posts 202
The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies.
6 posted 2002-11-11 10:02 AM


I know where your coming from in this piece. I too have had so many of those same feelings.

"I dont wish for jewelry,
I wish for a better life."

Reading this poem braught back many memories in my past. It was kind of a relief that I wasn't the only one who gets that way. Thats cool though, I've seen the professionsals and I'm almost all the way better. But I thank you because reading this gave me one more step up the long gray staircase that is recovery.

Great Poem.

Darkness

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