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Alone Afraid n' Away
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since 2002-10-28
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0 posted 2002-11-09 11:53 AM



My heart is strong, but my conscience weak
Yet still the secrets I will keep
Once you told me I started to think,
I thought so much I couldn't sleep
It's wrong I know to tell someone
About the day it all begun
But the temptation has never been this strong
to try and cover up what's really wrong
When you told me I began to weap
Up my bones it stared to creep
The saddness shown right through my eyes
Knowing now my life is filled with secrets and lies
You came to me in need of help
But I couldn't do it, nor could I say how I really felt
What you did was wrong and you know it too
Even when I tried to help, in one ear and out the other it flew
Come clean, and please let your heart be true!

So I will say unto my dismay:
My heart is strong, but my conscience weak yet still the secrets I will keep

[This message has been edited by Alone Afraid n' Away (11-09-2002 11:55 AM).]

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foreverwithyou
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since 2002-10-20
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Wonderland
1 posted 2002-11-09 12:04 PM


good write man good write

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

dinky
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Posts 258

2 posted 2002-11-09 12:05 PM


this was really good chief
was this ur first poem???
cuz this was really great and i am gonna end the reply here b4 i start to ramble
~sam~

devinechild22
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since 2002-08-28
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3 posted 2002-11-09 12:08 PM


Welcome to PIP katie! It was good for a first post. I know I just cant wait for the other posts to come. I think that LP cant either.
             *Allison*

devinechild22
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4 posted 2002-11-09 12:08 PM


Welcome to PIP katie! It was good for a first post. I know I just cant wait for the other posts to come. I think that LP cant either.
             *Allison*

devinechild22
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5 posted 2002-11-09 12:15 PM


oops...It seems I replied twice..LOL
           *Allison*

NSnaomian
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6 posted 2002-11-09 01:31 PM


I really enjoyed that, thanks for sharing!
Welcome to Passions! Definitely excited to see more from you.

Laura

"I have seen what a laugh can do. It can transform almost unbearable tears into something bearable, even hopeful."
-Bob Hope-

Auguste
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7 posted 2002-11-09 03:06 PM


Very sad, but a well written piece.  Welcome to Passions!  Look for a special greeting in your e-mail.
Local Parasite
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8 posted 2002-11-10 12:57 PM


Nicely done.  Welcome to Passions, have fun reading, replying and sharing in here...

Hope to see much more of you.  

Parasite

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
~Aldous Huxley

rimmie
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since 2002-08-09
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Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada
9 posted 2002-11-10 07:57 AM


Very well done! I reaqlly liked how you ended it!!!

~RuZ~

devinechild22
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10 posted 2002-11-10 01:56 PM




He he .......he is dancing! LOL
              *Allison*
            

Alone Afraid n' Away
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11 posted 2002-11-10 10:20 PM


Thanks guys for goin so easy on me
Im plannin on postin another one soon but im new at this so it takes awil ya no??

                    

Riley
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12 posted 2002-11-11 08:30 AM


* gets very confused cause Allison said LP? HE can't wait for more? very confused * good first post or yea.....good job!


Ri

~*I found how to laugh, forgot how to smile, somehow your words, make it all worthwhile*~

vlraynes
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13 posted 2002-11-11 03:20 PM



Alone Afraid n' Away~
Welcome to Passions!  Great to have you here.
This was a wonderful first post and I look
forward to reading lots more from you.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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