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PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

0 posted 2002-11-08 10:08 PM

(I hardly ever rhyme…
I don't feel it's
'necessary',
but this one does-kinda.)

Apologizes cant make the scars go away.
No lie you tell me, and heal the immortal wounds you've made.
Apologies cant make the scars go away.
I'll let these feelings for you fade...
(it's so much better for me)
So just...
Forget everything I ever said about loving you.
Forget everything I ever did, or gave to you.
Forget all the fibs you said, to tell me I meant something.
Forget about how I lie here dead and crumbling.
(it's so much better for us)

"It's something I have to do..I was there too..before everything else..I was like you.."
!nin!
.the.fragile.

[This message has been edited by PoeticGoddessOfDepression (11-10-2002 12:30 PM).]

Darkness
Member

since 2002-10-17

Posts 202
The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies.

1 posted 2002-11-09 12:49 PM

I like this one especially the second stanza.

Very good.

Darkness

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

2 posted 2002-11-09 10:57 AM

I loved it! hehehehehehe. So yea...This was really good. I love it when people stray away from their original style and just surprise us with a non-rhymin or rhyming one. You definately did that.....
  I went to the mall yesterday and went to Hot Topic. There was this guy there workin the counter....He was kool. LOL Brittany Elbor came with me,Casey,and Rachel and she asked me if I was goin gothic because I bought three different kinds of bracelets from there...OK? LOL and then I`m sittin there with an Aeropostale bag to...Sure I`m goin gothic.LOL
     OK well I guess I`ll stop with my rambeling here and send you an email.LOL TTYL
               *Allison*

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

3 posted 2002-11-09 12:10 PM

sara i liked this one i wont ramble on about anything but u should come to the movies with us tonight man!!!

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

4 posted 2002-11-09 12:12 PM

THANx Darkness!!

Allison, the people there are really nice... espeically this one girl that works there, man,.... my mom wuz being mean to her tho.. she was like "i cant stand half of the stuff you have here! and she was all cussin and stuff.. and the chick said was "sorry' and went away.. i felt bad. my mom is gay.

Thanx cath

[This message has been edited by PoeticGoddessOfDepression (11-09-2002 12:15 PM).]

dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

5 posted 2002-11-09 11:54 PM

hey,
i really like this one
but i will say again (like i have about 50 other times) i luv rhyming poems
and this one was really good
the ring wasnt scary but it was good, u should'a came with
enough of me rambling, if u would consider that rambling which i dont think that i really do but now this i think is me beginnning to ramble so,
good write
~sam~

Sweetpoet16m4u04
Member

since 2002-11-10

Posts 153
Ma, U.S.A

6 posted 2002-11-10 12:26 PM

I really enjoyed this. I also think that many can relate to what you are goin through or went through. So keep on writing because you have some talent!!

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