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aries_luv_ppl
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since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448
Universal Mind

0 posted 2002-11-07 04:51 PM


I heard
Eyes are
Windows to min-d's heartshield;
When I...
I se-e
Your pre-tty eyes,
Your liveliness co-mes to dance.
Once there
Was a saying
That posture tells alot
About a person-
Yes, it tells me
The world behind your pretty face.
Sincere
In nature,
Make you vulnerable.
Frail like hair-pieces,
Yet warmth like steamed milk;
I love your eyes,
You little sweetheart.


Eliza Simmons
~Sometimes when I look back at what I wrote, I don't recognize the 'Me' in the past anymore.

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NSnaomian
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since 2002-07-22
Posts 232
In my troll closet I be
1 posted 2002-11-07 07:00 PM


I'm not much for titles really, so you wouldn't wanna hear from me! hehe..I do try tho.
I enjoyed this and it had great description. Thanks for the delightable read.

Laura

"I have seen what a laugh can do. It can transform almost unbearable tears into something bearable, even hopeful."
-Bob Hope-

Local Parasite
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2 posted 2002-11-08 01:07 PM


I have no idea what a good title would be.  I usually title my stuff really weirdly so you wouldn't like any of my suggestions anyways... hehe...

Just a hint - do NOT use something from the poem.  Make a title that refers to the poem somehow, or even points out something that the poem only alludes to.

Parasite

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
~Aldous Huxley

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