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dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

0 posted 2002-11-07 03:47 PM

livin here just aint no fun
everyday, i want to run
always in a fight,
nothings ever right
i jst want to leave,
and see how it would be,
how it is to be free
i control myself
and do what i want
it sounds so fun
but then reality hits
and the idea's all done

"sometimes i just feel like
quittin i still might
why do i put up this fight?
why do i still write?
sometimes its hard enough just dealin with re

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

1 posted 2002-11-07 04:01 PM

dang sam this was awsome Yo!!!! anwayz katie is on the phone now and she said that it was really good heeheehee ok good write bals ska dot

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

2 posted 2002-11-07 06:09 PM

I liked it a lot! Good one. I always like how you rhyme but I would be sooo excited to see you mix it up a bit and throw a non-rhymin one in there.
*Allison*

NSnaomian
Member

since 2002-07-22

Posts 232
In my troll closet I be

3 posted 2002-11-07 06:53 PM

I really liked that! YaY for you! I feel like I can relate too, exactly actually.
Yah!Keep em comin..

Laura

"I have seen what a laugh can do. It can transform almost unbearable tears into something bearable, even hopeful."
-Bob Hope-

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

4 posted 2002-11-08 12:49 PM

Not bad at all, Dinky. I did like the disorderly use of rhyme, it was a nice touch.

Keep writing.

Parasite

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
~Aldous Huxley

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

5 posted 2002-11-08 03:43 PM

Mr. Brandon's a freak. He hates germs...

NE way...
Yea--
i got a sucker in science for knowing what a parasite is.. lol- Miss. Lukemann is easy.
EWWW i didn't mean it like that.
I'm rableming.. you dont like that do you??

yea.. ne way.. again.

TO your poem..
I liked this because it was cool- and cool it was.
that sounds like something from the lord of the rings...
and eight (or 9) rings were given to the men... right...
anyway. yea.
yea.
good write.

52, oe 86, or 93-- i have to do my homework.

ttyl

Sara

"and just for the record...
just so you know.
i did not believe
that you could sink so low"

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