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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
Drowning inside the music that blasts from the stereo. Sound waves fill the room. I cant breathe. Cant move inside this crowded room. Lyrics bled with premature words inside of my head. Building into something unreal. I cant believe. Cant think inside this crowded head. What will it take to keep me believing that I'm really breathing?? What will it take to keep me wanting to? (too bad music just makes me feel worse, instead of being like one of the lucky people, and having it be like a remedy..  )"I slipped away farther from you, trying to find what is real. You're somebody else that I never knew, and someone that I cant feel." [This message has been edited by PoeticGoddessOfDepression (11-08-2002 02:32 PM).] |
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NSnaomian Member
since 2002-07-22
Posts 232In my troll closet I be |
I know what you mean. Thats me too! Good words ... "Lyrics bled with premature words inside of my head. Building into something unreal." My favorite lines I think. Good work. Laura Real friends are those who, when you feel you've made a fool of yourself, don't feel you've done a permanent job. |
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foreverwithyou Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 204Wonderland |
hey man isnt this the BESTEST smilie ever!??!!  i think so u agree? anywayz liked this one man "I am who I am who I am who am I?" [This message has been edited by foreverwithyou (11-06-2002 07:54 PM).] |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Elo...Good one. You are takin a shower now...so you said..LOL Keegan said that he was gonna give me hug tomorrow....I dunno if that was a threat or a kind gesture...You tell me. LOL *Allison* |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Sara - Liked this very much. You used a lot of internal almost-rhyme, which was neat... Well done. Parasite The key to understanding someone isn't walking a mile in their shoes; it's walking ten miles, barefoot. |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
domer, this was really good i dont really know if music makes me feel better or worse i guess it just depends cuz sometimes it makes me feel better and other times worse crap!!  i rambled sry  this was really good tho ~sam~ "sometimes i just feel like quittin i still might why do i put up this fight? why do i still write? sometimes its hard enough just dealin with re [This message has been edited by dinky (11-08-2002 02:14 PM).] |
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