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Kevin
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0 posted 2002-11-05 10:14 PM


Here ya go, challenge #2, nobody go looking me up now :/ divine child im looking at you hehe

Keep on going
Every second
Veer for no one
In your presence
Nothing anyone can say will take away your drive

Break the molding
Earn a lifetime
Deep within you
Needs are calling
Answer quickly and step closer, to you
Reaching
Zen



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LCBS
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1 posted 2002-11-06 12:05 PM


*gasp* Now all the stalkers will know who you are...

Although the large picture of you to the left thats been up there for a year probably didn't help with keeping your identity a secret.

Great one kev, gotta love those Z's


~Lis

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2 posted 2002-11-06 11:21 AM


cheater, you added your last name...

Doesn't bother me, though.  I guess you needed more space to complete your poem, and I can see how the last line of your first name didn't complete the poem on its own...

Love the trochaic flow of it all... but ehh, you wrecked it on that one line in your last name... you know, the long one.  I'm not gonna back my browser up just to see... I'm lazy and I have to get to class soon.

Nicely written nonetheless.  Enjoyed.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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3 posted 2002-11-06 01:07 PM


  I am NOT a stalker! LOL. But that is besides the point. I loved this poem. You did a great job.
             *Allison*

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4 posted 2002-11-06 03:49 PM


Yes, great job! I also loved it.

Laura

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5 posted 2002-11-06 07:00 PM


I enjoyed this one but i have to say that my fave one would have the be the cartwheel one lol yea but this one was kewl too almost as kewl as this hat> LOL

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

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6 posted 2002-11-07 02:14 AM


*thumbs up* Go Kevin!!!

I'm so cute!

vlraynes
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7 posted 2002-11-11 01:30 PM



Kevin~
True to your form, this is excellent!
You have really been growing in your poetry,
and I'm very much enjoying reading you.
Keep up the great work.
Thanks for participating in the challenge.
I hope to see you on the next one too.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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8 posted 2002-11-11 01:41 PM


This is a great answer to the challenge! I especailly like your opening.. it's great advice. It all flowed pretty well, although a few lines were a little long. It didn't take away from the poem, though! good work

Most of us go to our grave with our music still inside of us.

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