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Ina
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Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2002-11-05 09:39 PM



In your eyes i drown with a hatred,
Non-existent life boils down to the
Avulsion on my misery.
hahahaha that was horrible
how bout this one


Inexplicable phenomenas of love
Never ending with a smile, its the
Amputation of my heart


oohhhh these were horrible well
i only have 3 letters to work with and thats my excuse

Regina

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1 posted 2002-11-05 10:12 PM


I like the second one hun! Just cause you only have three letters to work with, doesn't mean that your creative genius can't shine through I certainly couldn't have done that with three letters; I had a hard time with 7 letters lol   Challenge met!
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2 posted 2002-11-06 11:16 AM


Try a senryu maybe?  Ooh, that reminds me of an older challenge...   heheh...

I like the first one best... but I think if you took a bit more time you could come up with something really awesome.  Just pace yourself, Ina... take your time.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

vlraynes
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3 posted 2002-11-11 01:16 PM



Ina~
I have to say that I'm very impressed with
what you came up with, and I give you a lot
of credit for even attempting this with so
little to work with.  You did great!
Thanks for participating in the challenge.
I hope to see you involved in the next one too.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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